Savior

Savior

A Poem by Mitji
"

Just something I kinda went through

"

The dark is closing in

Where has everybody gone

I can't find the light

Have I done something wrong

 

I can't find any smiles

Am I looking in all the wrong places

Everywhere I look, I just see frowns

Please somebody direct me to where I should be

 

Why does nobody help me

I feel a dark sheet covering my thoughts

I crumble to the floor

I am completely encompassed in black

 

A hand reaches out and grabs mine

I let out a scream

The hand abruptly lets go

I close my mouth

 

I look at the owner of the hand

I am now on my feet

The owner smiles a great smile

I am now following

 

A smile burns through the dark sheet

I am being led to a circle of light

I feel all the blackness fading

The circle, I realize are smiling people

 

I am feeling brighter

"We missed you where have you been?"

I am now beaming, I am smiling

"We're happy to see you so happy"

 

The depression is gone, was it ever there

I have friends, I just wasn't looking

I am back, I am returning to myself

Everyone is smiling, it's contagious

 

These, my friends, are my saviors

Pulled from the torture of darkness

They saved me from myself

And brought me back to life

© 2009 Mitji


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Bravo, bravo!
This is a great poem with a nice, nice flow.
There were a few places where the lines were a bit too long. I would suggest reading it aloud to yourself and making a few changes in the meter here and there.
Thanks for requesting me to read this!

Scott

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I read this already, stop sending me read requests of things I already read! Yeah so I think it's good and I told you to post it remember? .......

Posted 10 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice.
reminds me of my girlfriends poems.
i love these kind of poems

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Mitji
Mitji

New Gloucester, ME



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I love to read and write, and i love music! I love to read, in fact I am addicted to it, my mother has gotten mad at me saying i read too much. I wish I lived in Australia. I want to be a journalist, .. more..

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A Poem by Mitji



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