Chained Sanity (A Love Poem)

Chained Sanity (A Love Poem)

A Poem by iron_rose
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It started out as a song, but then I decided to play around with the rhymes, and it ended up too cheesy for a song. So here's a poem that gave me a hard time coming up with a title.

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I'm reaching out to tell her
How lovely all has been
It's come to pass, I feel at last
The sun upon my skin

My heart is warmed 
Just looking at the wind against her hair
And her scent that never leaves me
Reminds me she's always there

Her smile puts in my heart
A million songs for me to sing
Her love teaches me that flight
Never really needed any wings

She makes me rise, she makes me run
Across an open field
Of dreams I've only dreamt of dreaming
Where only her love is revealed

Her beauty shines above me
Like the rising of the morn
And as her smile meets my sight
I melt away just to be reborn

Reborn into a brand new being 
Like a flower with no name
Like a word yet without meaning
A new torch with but the same flame

And God, it feels so good to be alive
When you see all your dreams coming up to life
She's my freedom and she's my chains
And if I'd ever want to break free, then I must be insane

Wow, all that trouble with rhymes. 
When all I really wanted to say was
I love her

© 2011 iron_rose


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Que
This is incredibly sweet :)
Yes, it is pretty cheesy, but the nice thing is that often times, people use the same types of expressions, whereas you made new ones. You know what I mean?
Favourite lines:
"Her smile puts in my heart
A million songs for me to sing
Her love teaches me that flight
Never really needed any wings"
I have to say, this really made me smile.
Great job!
Cheers and have a good day.



Posted 9 Years Ago


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exceptionally sweet and endearing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Awww. Any girl would melt when you read it to her! I love it!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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I love the flow for this. Obviously it's an adorable little piece, but also beautiful as far as the word usage and the smoothness of the poem. I can feel the love behind this, for reallll. The first stanza is amazingggG! And the last stanza is sweet...because it's just straight up!!! The best way to be. ANYWAY brilliant poem!

Posted 9 Years Ago


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Oh, I think I melted a little. Well done, it's adorable. Keep it up. Sometimes cheesy is a good thing.

Posted 9 Years Ago


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This is amazing! I love it! and I agree it is cheesy but most of the time cheesy is cute!


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Que
This is incredibly sweet :)
Yes, it is pretty cheesy, but the nice thing is that often times, people use the same types of expressions, whereas you made new ones. You know what I mean?
Favourite lines:
"Her smile puts in my heart
A million songs for me to sing
Her love teaches me that flight
Never really needed any wings"
I have to say, this really made me smile.
Great job!
Cheers and have a good day.



Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Awww that's really cute! Very wonderful rhyming! I absolutely love this poem! It's fantastic!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on August 30, 2011
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Tags: chained, chains, sanity, love, poems, about her, feelings

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Cebu, Philippines



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