letting go

letting go

A Poem by iron_rose
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this is as dark as i can get, and i'm sorry but i can't resist surprising you! enjoy!

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Sitting in the silent dark

My skin too numb to feel

Bloody fingers interlocked

My gaze as cold as steel

 

My withered chest it feels so full

It’s getting harder now to breathe

And though I sit on a solid floor

I start to sink beneath

 

I find myself falling

Falling ever so fast

Then I find myself wondering

Will I hit the ground at last?

 

Coz this endless longing and waiting

Is starting to get absurd

Though I cry and though I wail

I know I wouldn't be heard

 

For the distance between us

Which your own feet have made

Put you in a better place

But the price, only I have paid

 

Your dreams took you away

From where your promise lead us

Where love held us up

And our kisses fed us

 

But now you're not here

I’m left alone with this unbearable itch

I hope you're really happy now

You selfish little b...

Butterfly you!

© 2011 iron_rose


Author's Note

iron_rose
i hope you appreciate the twist... :)

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Well! The ending was certainly a twist! Witty!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The ending dear one is marvelous! ha! I like your twist....
I did, and do! also the set up, with a lot of adjectives.

E.L.

Posted 11 Years Ago


iron_rose

11 Years Ago

thanks. :)
you got a good flow...

i like tha stanza:

But now you're not here

I’m left alone with this unbearable itch

I hope you're really happy now

You selfish little b...

Butterfly you!

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is very good. Very deep and very emotional...haha to the ending btw ;) Ha

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is really neat.

Posted 12 Years Ago


lol it was deep for a long time there, and suddenly I laughed. Well done, I did appreciate the twist. well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


ROFLOLMAO! :p
for a butterfly in human form.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Wow! This was such a great poem and it was quite dark i see that! It mustve been hard for you considering you are usually cheery and as YOU say "cheesy" lol :P I love your writing style though! :) Wonderful job as always! :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


hahahahah. ayosssssssssss. xD

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on September 6, 2011
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Tags: butterfly, love, poem, song, break up

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iron_rose

Cebu, Philippines



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