The Glass

The Glass

A Poem by The Fallen
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First thing posted on here in a while..

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The Glass


No matter where I see it,

I'm determined to shatter it to bits.

It's something I despise,

Their voices leaking with lies


It's an ungodly look,

The pain beneath her eyes,

She's been mistaken,

For someone who rarely cries.


As soon as my fist makes impact,

I realize it's confidence,

I seem to lack.


The time of day seems to collide,

And I can't seem to tell the truth from the lies.

I feel as if I am shattering my own soul,

That stares back at me through the glass.

© 2014 The Fallen


Author's Note

The Fallen
Back for the time being... I need a break from Twin Blades...Took forever to write the first part...

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amazingly written!
I see so much potential in your writing!
my favorite part was, "It's an ungodly look,
The pain beneath her eyes,
She's been mistaken,
For someone who rarely cries."
Thanks for your amazing poetry!
can you by chance look at my Story The Blonde girl? that would be great.
Keep up the amazing work!

C. Lee Battaglia


Posted 8 Years Ago


Beautiful...what it reminds me of is deep thought.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Good ideas and the way they have been eloped together is very well done.
But the layout if you read it aloud doesn't work as well as it could, and i really like this.

"As soon as my fist makes impact,

I realize it's confidence,

I seem to lack."

The rest of it goes together perfectly, just this part is played out differently to the others and it made me fall over my words a little bit.



Posted 10 Years Ago


Love the last stanza, and the second last. You must have started getting into it more and more as you wrote and eventually just flowed out. Confidence is something a lot of people battle with (from my experience especially writers), not so much in expression but in character and overall posture. Anyway I'll stop rambling, thanks for the read!

Posted 10 Years Ago


"Its an ungodly look,/ the pain beneath her eyes" I really love that line. it makes me think, that god's children shouldn't cry, they should be happy. I really love that Its beautiful! Thank you for writing.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Interesting poem. I liked it. Lies fogging the air to where you can't see. Good concept. Great work

Posted 10 Years Ago


nicely worded.. I feel similar emotions whence catching my image, mocking me through distorted reflection .. good stuff.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Raw and uninhibited. Respect for a well written poem with a rant that packs a punch.

Posted 10 Years Ago


I'm glad you're back for now! I'm sure that Twin Blades will be spectacular, considering how long its taken. This is a great poem. I feel like everyone is looking into their own glass...trying to find themselves amongst all the pain... It can be a very twisted process.

100/100

Posted 10 Years Ago


Felicity's Eve

10 Years Ago

Yes! I'd love to read it!:D
The Fallen

10 Years Ago

Alright awesome! Ill send it to you tomorrow then :)
Felicity's Eve

10 Years Ago

Great!!! Can't wait to read it!!! :)

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Added on January 12, 2014
Last Updated on January 12, 2014
Tags: Looking, Glass, Depressed, Hated, Self-confidance, Soul, Lacking, Crying, Lies

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The Fallen
The Fallen

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