I hear you..& Listening.. Let alone Care.

My wished last night on New Years Eve

was to experience happiness in general.

Instead of fear, dread, anxiety and stress.

But it's easy to wish and dream.

Reality is harder to achieve. 

With all the will in the world.

You end up coming back to feeling

the same old exact emotions you

felt before.

Taking you over and making you

feel so flat, numb and scared.

Wish I could just erase and wipe the

slate clean and start afresh with no

woes or upset.

And just picture beautiful golden

moments inside my head and heart.

That makes me smile and feel so good

yet too so alive.

With a heavy heart, I feel lost.

Broken and timid. As I future into

this new time ahead.

Sadly I know i am not alone in this

feeling. As others are feeling like me

in this world. Over something personal

going on in their own life.

That is affecting their emotional state

of mind and year too ahead.

Thinking of everyone. Who needs comfort,

love, compassion and a friend.

To a turbulent stressful year ahead. 

I hear you and care too.

Hugs and much love sent your way.

And a listening ear if you need one.

Let alone someone to care.

Drop me a line anytime.

Reviews

[Ookpik]

Dawn is a very fitting pseudonym for an attitude like this - being a beacon for the world's wounded can be a very arduous undertaking, the lighthouse guiding in the lost freighters, and I definitely appreciate the self sacrificing altruism required to maintain this sort of belief.

On a technical basis your meter and composition are pretty sharp, though my advice would be to use enjambment less so to maintain structure and more as a device that can sometimes emphasize your point,

(E.G.)

With a heavy heart, I feel lost.
Broken and timid. As I future into
this new time ahead.

vs.

With a heavy heart, I feel lost,
broken and timid as I future into this

new time ahead.

By isolating "new time ahead" in your comp, you can actually project that the new time ahead (or the future) is separate from the previous couplet emphasized by adjectives like lost, broken or timid.

It's otherwise still a really nice piece, but if you want to up your technical game little tricks like this can sometimes split the difference.

Thank you for sharing your thoughts though dawn, and again, the theme and idea are undoubtedly very powerful - really enjoyed reading and I'll try to keep a closer eye on your future work

-Ook

[Onlyme]

Thank you Ook for your thoughtful and kind review. And helpfulness Dawn.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

...And the same to you dear Dawn. This is a warm, heartfelt and touching poem. Beautifully written. May the New Year bring you peace, love, comfort, hope and miracles. Xoxo

[Onlyme]

Thank you Annette, Like wise to you and your family. Peace, love, Happiness, Comfort and Joy. With some lovely miracle. too. hug Dawn