The Unhappy Soul wanting to be Free

You can be lonely in a crowded room.

Yet still, see the darkness

but pin on

your fake face

to flash a smile.

To hide the suffering

and pain within.

You can have

a great family.

Who really cares

and love you.

But actually

don't know you

at all.

You can have mates you

hang with.

But really  they

don't understand

you.

The show is false.

You living a lie.

You just wished you

could be honest

and open.

And be who you want to be

full.

But fear,

intimidation,

dread and secrets

keep you hidden

from the real you

deep

inside.

And the depression

and suffering

come to the surface.

Let alone the

frustration and anger.

When you are

really alone.

In your room.

torturing yourself

for not being true

to YOU.

Reviews

[PatrickPink]

This is a heavy piece, fraught with emotion. You do a great job of conveying isolation to the reader through repetition! If I was gonna give any criticism, maybe have a think about where to break your lines; if you isolate the words on the page, they'll have even more impact than they already do!

[Onlyme]

Thanks Patrick, I must admit, I am not good at that. Just write what I feel. Grammar is not my fortay. What you see is what you get with me. Dawn.

[Dave]

Dawn it is a truth that we all too often are forced to hide our true feelings. So much so that family and even our closest friends don't really know how anxious we are about our lives and the way it is going. Isolating ourselves in a cocoon of self protection. We are hoping that one day we will burst forth and be able to reveal our true inner thoughts.

Take care - Dave

[Onlyme]

So very true Dave.

[Richard M]

Dearest Dawn (((HUGEST, HUGEST HUGS))) to you. I understand and feel your words. Always here my darling friend, email me any time. xoxx

[Onlyme]

Thanks Richard your a true sweetheart. It works both ways anytime drop me aline too. It's always lovely to hear from you. You know that. hugs. Dawn.