Love Becomes You

Love Becomes You

A Poem by Hannah Erickson
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Written for a special someone.

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Love becomes you.

It wraps you in its gentle glow

Then the flame grows

And gleems from your eyes.

Your smile widens and brightens.

Written there is a glimmering hope

That you are no longer alone

In this vast and lonely world

And never again will lonliness grip

Your strengthened heart's new rhythm.

The windows to your soul still glisten

Embarrassing a vain and blistered sun

In his temporary blue domain.

Your newfound light is eternal;

Your aura a purer crystalized indigo.

It grows with the swell in your heart.

Every touch, every kiss, causes it to pulse.

You gleefully allow love to consume you

And so it becomes you. 

© 2008 Hannah Erickson


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Good job!!! It is really good.

Posted 7 Years Ago


This was a delightful write. Enjoyed, ty PS

Posted 15 Years Ago


oh what lovely write,oh yes love can do all this and more..
when it suddenly rushes in and take all over you..you will start to shine and glow
your eyes will brighten and glow..like a halo of light emanates from all around you
your eyes ,your smile will brighten and shine..could see there that glimmering hope
you will never then be alone..
windows to your heart and soul will glisten..will even embaress the shining sun
your heart swells from so much emotions,every touch ,every kiss will make it pulse
as you are consumed by the so much love,that you know to have engulfed you
lovely wonderful write,really inspiring,so dreamy ,so lovely
lovely write

Posted 15 Years Ago


A superb write. Loved the imagery portrayed. A total pleasure to read your poetry.

Posted 15 Years Ago


Great vivid imagery, and a wonderful execution of such a cliched subject- you manage to take the mangled emotion of love and put it in a way that nobody else has. Your descriptions are absolutely dazzling, and the words paint a beautiful landscape in my head. However, I'm having a little bit of trouble getting this poem to flow when read out loud. This isn't necessarily bad, but it's always nice to build a good rhythm and keep the flow going. Great job, overall.

Posted 15 Years Ago


Incredible well written piece.
Great emotional imagery.
Every touch, every kiss, causes it to pulse.
You gleefully allow love to consume you
And so it becomes you. I really loved this part.

Posted 15 Years Ago


Very loving, your emotions for that special one are clearly revealed.

Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.

Posted 15 Years Ago


Really great, good writing. Solid work with a clear message and a nice flow.
Good stuff!
jaff :)

Posted 15 Years Ago


This was just f*****g beautiful. A heartfelt and stirring ode!

Posted 15 Years Ago


This is really beautiful! You can really feel the emotion flowing through it..it's wonderful!
Good work,
~Lauren

Posted 15 Years Ago



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Hannah Erickson
Hannah Erickson

Oakland, CA



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This is the only place where my writing from high school still exists. A lot of it is embarrassing to adult me, but I'm not going to begrudge teenage me of her thoughts and feelings. I may add som.. more..

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