MAN WHISTLING IN SWIMMING POOL

MAN WHISTLING IN SWIMMING POOL

A Poem by R J Askew
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I am doing breast-stroke, my head going under water for the long glide of each stroke. Maaaar-vellous! I am y'r'totally, utterly, blissfully happy cuttlefish when a-swimming. An old guy appears to work poolside.

"

The pool is mine

And mind alone

I hear him first

The pool whis'ler

I glide along

'It's been a hard...'

(Water in ears)

'...I've been working...'

(Glug of water)

'Penny Lane, Pen...'

(Glug, a-glug, glug)

'We all live in...'

(Water in tears)

'...a yellow sub...'

(A-glug, a-glug)

Roll like otter 

Gentle back stroke

Watch him working

Dusting pot plants

Whis'ling away

'She loves you, yeah...'

Roll onto front

(Water in fears)

Echo echoes

The pool is his

All his alone,

Echo echoes

Echoes echo

Deep in your mind

(Water in years).

 

 

 

© 2008 R J Askew


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Yessssssssssss, I love it, I love it, I love it! The whistling man, your haphazard hearing .. the parenthesised lines! You are such an inventive writer/poet .. just love your work but then, 'love swimming. Sound echoes around a pool too, virtually distorts it sometimes, makes it cannon instead of ricochet.

' Roll onto front ~~ (Water in fears) ~~ Echo echoes ~~ The pool is his ~~ All his alone, ~~ Echo echoes ~~
Echoes echo ~~ Deep in your mind ~~ (Water in years).' What a yummy few lines!

Going away smiling and cheering!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Yessssssssssss, I love it, I love it, I love it! The whistling man, your haphazard hearing .. the parenthesised lines! You are such an inventive writer/poet .. just love your work but then, 'love swimming. Sound echoes around a pool too, virtually distorts it sometimes, makes it cannon instead of ricochet.

' Roll onto front ~~ (Water in fears) ~~ Echo echoes ~~ The pool is his ~~ All his alone, ~~ Echo echoes ~~
Echoes echo ~~ Deep in your mind ~~ (Water in years).' What a yummy few lines!

Going away smiling and cheering!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

What a cool Beatles tune you have woven!
Amazing ....
TY for entering!

Lynda

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"The pool is mine

And mind alone"

Did you mean this or "mine alone"? Just curious because it stuck out to me, but also because of the wordplay of it. I like how you mixed "Yellow Submarine" lyrics in with your poetry...gave it a lovely feel throughout :)

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Wow! What a great combination - swimming, Beatles... Love it!! Very creative writing...

Posted 15 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

You do good things with words. THey flow. They take us away from our computer and into the hot, humid confines of the swimming pool. I can hear the old man singing. Great write.

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Water in year.. love it and all the Beatles througout ..sounds like diving deep and blotting out the sound .. a lovely thought .. good poem, Orlando!

Chloe
xoxo

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Love how this flows, just like the swimming you describe. A nice gentle poem, fun. Felt like I just had a morning swim.

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

If you were here, I would stand up and applaud. That was so much fun. I really loved that. It really made me smile... and I needed a good smile today. Blessings dear one.

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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