I want you baby

At night I ly in bed

Hopeing some time

during the night

that you would show up.

I ly in bed

Wanting you

Needing you

Missing you

And most important

Loveing you.

I know you love me too

And I know you wish I was in your arms.

Baby I wanna hold you,

I wanna be with you right now

Baby I want you!

Reviews

[The Water Queen]

I love this. It shows the effect of love and lust great job.

[Coyote Poetry]

Those words whisper on the phone on lonely night are helpful. Made those dream dreams come alive. A beautiful poem. The emotion of love are strong in your words. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[zappy]

this is very great

[Wicahpi]

Aw young love :)

a few spelling errors along the way
(hoping, loving, lay or lie)

I'd encourage those edits so this poem
will stand as a perfect love note.

[deeps]

This is a beuatiful sincere write.

[Dakota]

Know just how you feel!

[A.Lee]

Very nice work. I love the feel of this. A few spelling errors ("ly" should be "lie" and "loveing" should be "loving") but other than that, great job!

[An owl on the moon]

There is such a beautiful desire expressed through your words. That longing for your sweetheart. Wonderful words!

[Ruth]

Poignant!
xx

[Senseless whatever]

Good write. The message couldn't be clearer.