Hand-In-Hand

My very first Sonnet ever. This Sonnet is about the forever remembered love for a mother or grandmother. remembered.

Hand-In-Hand....

Her tired eyes saw more than I'll ever know;

long silv'ry hair piled high upon her head,

the clean fresh scent of times so long ago ...

warm stinging tears are those I often shed.

Remembering her laughter through our years,

when we walked hand in hand along the shore.

As lovely sounds of church bells filled my ears,

my love still held by ocean's distant roar.

Now, fresh white, fragrant lilies near her lie,

a few soft petals fallen from the rain ...

their faces wet, turned up toward the sky;

along with them she takes rest from her pain. 

Sweet memories we shared now mean so much,

each day, I long for her caressing touch.

                                   ~~~

                                     

Author's Note

A very special thank you to Richard!! Who saw this as a Sonnet (I had no idea what a Sonnet even was!!) and, helped me complete it. He opened up a whole new world to me.
Thank you,
Lisa

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was particularly touching to me. I was the primary caregiver for my mother the last five years of her life. It was the hardest and most challenging task I have ever undertaken. Given the chance, I'd gladly do it all again. By her grave, I was almost too exhausted to cry. But I found great comfort in knowing her worldly suffering had come an end even though I know I will miss her until we meet again. Thank you for this, I enjoyed. F.

[Lisasview]

Thank you Fabian,
I am glad you liked it.
My plan is to rework my Sonnet so please look for it again.
I too took care of my mother for several years.
And, of my father in law and also my step mother.
Loads of work but I would never trade it. For the precious time I spent with them will be in my memory forever.

[Lisasview]

Hi Fabian, Just submitted my newest version of this poem and I also submitted one that I am working on.
Hoping you have time to look at them.
Lisa

[Sami Khalil]

An honorable tribute to a passing, filled with beautiful memories and lovely appreciation. I hope all is well in Spain. Until we see you again around the site.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for your lovely positive review my dear friend Sami
I have been down with the flu for 4 weeks!!
Hope to get back to writing soon..
Merry Christmas 🎄 Lisa

[Sami Khalil]

Speedy recovery. You too. You are welcome. Take all the time.

[Lisasview]

Thank you!!

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Lisa, my dear wonderful and lovely Poetess!

This beautifully majestic piece of your heart set to pen of page speaks to my heart of only two women I ever loved with all my heart in this world, blessed and better for the privilege of of having known them within their ladylike graciousness of allowing me to be a part of their lives, but, now, they are both gone, lying quietly within the Earth as my tearstained life goes by moment by moment, day by day ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[Lisasview]

Hi my dearest Marvin,
For some reason I thought you had already read this little sonnet of mine. It was the very first Sonnet I ever wrote and posted on Writerscafe. I have been out of the loop for 3 weeks as I got terribly sick and only in the past couple of days have been getting my strength back. Not sure what it was,,the flu, or?? but for at least two of those weeks I have had bronchitis, really horrible..the coughing really is exhausting. Can not wait to get back to writing!! Your lovely review inspires me..
Thank you,
Lisa

[Andrew John]

I rather like this one, and you say it's your first sonnet. Good one. Most enjoyable to read.

[Lisasview]

Hi Andrew,
Yes, my very first one. I wrote this awhile back and had no idea it was actually a sonnet. (No education in poetry) At the beginning of this year I decided to finally post my work. I have been writing and putting my poetry in a drawer for a vey long time. When I posted this I was told by a fabulous poet that this is actually a sonnet!! If you read back at my reviews and find the first one you will see what happened... So since then I have posted several sonnets and poems...Funny how life is...
Thank you for reading and reviewing...
Lisa, from California but now in Spain.

[willweb]

A beautiful heart touching sonnet. The flow is smooth, the rhymes spot on and the theme something everyone should cherish. Very nicely done.

[Lisasview]

How very nice to hear from you.and, ofcourse delighted you like my Sonnet.
Thank you so much for reviewing!
Lisa, still in Spain

[@r[@nE]

Thanks a lot for recommending this poem. I am also new to the idea of what exactly is a sonnet and how is it written.
It was actually very touching poem since moms and grandmas are always among the most important persons in our lives. Being a late teenager imagining that someday these people won't be beside me already makes my eyes teary .
the poem is however really nice and very well written.

Regards,

@r[@ne

[Lisasview]

What, you are a teenager???
You write so well... I am really amazed.
Thank you again for your kind review,
Lisa

[Richard Knox]

Lisa,
Thank you for suggesting this poem to me. It does, indeed, speak eloquently of experiences and emotions that must be common among many (sadly, not all) children and their mothers or grandmothers, but also calls forth specific memories of my mother and me, as I’m sure it must for most readers. Coincidentally, on my way for croissants and espresso this morning, I saw a young mother walking hand-in-hand with her blond little girl, and was struck by the tenderness of that simple scene. Then you recommended I read this poem, and the artwork that accompanies it depicts a very similar scene to the one I witnessed. A second coincidence: my mother’s name was Lillian, and one of her sisters called her Lilly, so that line in your poem was especially poignant for me. Serendipity abounds! Lovely sonnet! Thank you!

[Lisasview]

Hi Richard,
How is it possible that I did not thank you for your reading and reviewing my poem!!!! 4 weeks ago!!
I remember reading your review..and thought for sure I had left you a BIG thank you...perhaps I forgot to press send...I reread your wonderful review and so appreciate all your fabulous comments...
Lisa, getting to be late afternoon in Spain

[Richard Knox]

Hi Lisa,
I’m glad you liked my comments. I’ve been wondering lately if Writers Cafe has been a little glitchy. I’ve written several reviews in the past three or four days and have received no responses. (I was beginning to wonder if I had violated a rule of online writer’s etiquette of which I was unaware!) One of those is your poem Luscious, which I think is wonderful. Anyway, thank you for taking the time to come back to this review and responding.
It’s a beautiful summer morning (finally) here in Eastern Washington, US.

[Lisasview]

Let me look at Luscious and see if I got a review from you... I will let you know...
I also just now posted Guardian of Memories and yesterday I posted Go Go Dancer...

[Robert Haigh]

I have written several sonnets myself, and this one of yours is a very good one! Nicely expressed, with an easy flow and natural, rather than forced, rhymes. A good job all round!

[Lisasview]

How very nice of you to say... This was my very first try at a Sonnet.. I wrote one more, Pearls that you might enjoy.. I have been writing since I was 10 years old (so 64 years ago!!) and all my work is not planned, so never forced..it just comes out of me.. I only recently decided to start posting for the first time ever. I see you play the guitar...I sing and since we recently moved to Spain I am working on learning a Spainish song (I really do not speak Spanish) and I am working with a Spaniard that plays guitar beautifully...and speaks no English... Such an adventure..
Thank you again for reading and reviewing my work..I will be looking at yours...
Lisa, now in Spain

[Robert Haigh]

Yes, I play the guitar - also ukulele - and sing. Nice to hear that you sing too. I am of a similar vintage to you, and music helps keep me young!

[Lisasview]

Love music and it goes along with all my creative endeavours..

[Red Brick Keshner]

Just the other day we were commenting at home on how we haven't heard the peal of church bells in oh so many years. Add to that the many other familiar things and sounds that we rarely come across that used to fill our waking hours. Such a wonderful experience this poem, specially bringing to mind and heart those that are no longer with us today. Thanks for sharing. Frederick.

[Lisasview]

Yes, the enjoyment of certain sounds..
Sometimes we get used to these sounds and take them for granted... but when they are gone we long for them.
Moving from America to Spain has brought new sounds into our daily lives... for example the roosters....love that sound.
This Sonnet is the very first one I posted ever anywhere...
You might like my poems Time or Innocence..
Lisa

[Red Brick Keshner]

Thanks for the direct, I will make my way there. next. As for myself, I haven't ascertained your preferences yet so will have you just wander through the selection and pray that you chance upon one or so that would be to your liking. Thanks again. Frederick.

[Lisasview]

Thank you..I will check out your poems.. Mine are quite varied as many are from my early 20's 1970...Never know exactly what one wants to read...
Lisa, now in Spain

[Red Brick Keshner]

Thanks Lisa. Most of my early work would go back to the late 70's, the 80's and 90's. Frederick.