Hand-In-Hand

My very first Sonnet ever. This Sonnet is about the forever remembered love for a mother or grandmother. remembered.

Hand-In-Hand....

Her tired eyes saw more than I'll ever know;

long silv'ry hair piled high upon her head,

the clean fresh scent of times so long ago ...

warm stinging tears are those I often shed.

Remembering her laughter through our years,

when we walked hand in hand along the shore.

As lovely sounds of church bells filled my ears,

my love still held by ocean's distant roar.

Now, fresh white, fragrant lilies near her lie,

a few soft petals fallen from the rain ...

their faces wet, turned up toward the sky;

along with them she takes rest from her pain. 

Sweet memories we shared now mean so much,

each day, I long for her caressing touch.

                                   ~~~

                                     

Author's Note

A very special thank you to Richard!! Who saw this as a Sonnet (I had no idea what a Sonnet even was!!) and, helped me complete it. He opened up a whole new world to me.
Thank you,
Lisa

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was particularly touching to me. I was the primary caregiver for my mother the last five years of her life. It was the hardest and most challenging task I have ever undertaken. Given the chance, I'd gladly do it all again. By her grave, I was almost too exhausted to cry. But I found great comfort in knowing her worldly suffering had come an end even though I know I will miss her until we meet again. Thank you for this, I enjoyed. F.

[Lisasview]

Thank you Fabian,
I am glad you liked it.
My plan is to rework my Sonnet so please look for it again.
I too took care of my mother for several years.
And, of my father in law and also my step mother.
Loads of work but I would never trade it. For the precious time I spent with them will be in my memory forever.

[Lisasview]

Hi Fabian, Just submitted my newest version of this poem and I also submitted one that I am working on.
Hoping you have time to look at them.
Lisa

[Soren]

What a beautiful piece of work this is. Touching and full of feeling with excellent rhyme and meter. I loved it

[Lisasview]

Such a kind review dear Soren.
Thank you so much!!

[Fay Slimm]

Touchingly moving this honest write which will comfort the loss of all who still miss a loved one - - top marks Lisa for a beautifully written memory of loving time spent with a mother or grandmother and congrats on mastering the sonnet

[Lisasview]

Thank you Fay for reviewing my very first ever Sonnet.
I do appreciate it!!
Lisa

[Stella Armour]

wow! and you even got the iambic pentameter right ... well done Lisa :)

[Lisasview]

To be honest most of it was done by mistake because
I have never had any training in poetry or Sonnets..This just came to me..so strange...Thank you so much for your kind review.
Lisa

[Stella Armour]

beware Lisa.... sonnets can become very addictive lol

[Lisasview]

Yes, I feel that way.. I did write another Sonnet which I submitted but the rest are poems..

[Anahat]

This is so pure and heart-touching.
I absolutely loved the lines:

“Now, fresh white, fragrant lilies near her lie,
a few soft petals fallen from the rain.”

Ah, how beautifully expressed and such vivid imagery. Would love to read more of your work.

Love,
Anahat

[Lisasview]

Good morning,
Thank you for reading my Sonnet Anahat,
I thought you would like it.
read moreGood morning,
Thank you for reading my Sonnet Anahat,
I thought you would like it.
Glad you plan to read more of my work.
Perhaps start at the one I submitted right after Hand~In ~Hand that way you will read my work in the order I submitted each poem...
Thank you again,
Lisa, in Spain

[Richard M]

A beautifully written piece Lisa, with beautiful memories to keep and relive. My condolences to you! I wish for you, a peace in your heart and a smile, as you recall.
Take care my friend.
Richard

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much..
I appreciate you reviewing my first Sonnet which was the very first I ever submitted anywhere-ever.
To relive beautiful memories is a wonderful thing.
Lisa, nearly 8am in Costa Blanca North, Spain

[KWP]

Truly lovely.

I have just sent the day at my Aunt's funeral. She was such a happy soul. Amazing lady who was dearly loved. Reminds me to live, to keep living, enjoying the moments and sharing the love as you have done so with your darling mother.

X

[Lisasview]

Losing someone you love is so difficult.
I appreciate your words...
Thank you,
Lisa

[Carola]

a lovely gentle poem lisa.
i remember one of my grandmothers more than the other. i always remember sitting around the breakfast table as she lived with us for a year before we emigrated to australia.
cheerio carola

[Lisasview]

Hi there Carola,
I am going back over all my poems to make sure I have thanked everyone that has reviewed my poems and I found yours from 7 months ago!!! I wonder why my thank you never got sent...so strange. I so love this review.. The fact that it reminded you of a special time with your grandmother..how wonderful.
Lisa, still in Spain

[C. M. Miller]

Begin. Life. Fluid. Stasis. Memories. Reaching. Believing. Longing. Holding. Release. End. You said it all. Thank you!

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for your very kind review..
Lisa

[M. J. Smith]

Such beautiful thoughts. We never know how much they mean until they are gone. nicely done.

[Lisasview]

Thank you for your kind review...
I really appreciate it.
Lisa, now in Spain

[Wild Rose]

Memories of ma in law
Silver hair, and weak; she came to us.
After looking after dad in law for two years, alone.
We brought her the two hundred miles home. "I wont be hee for long" She said.
It wasn't long before she demanded some kitchen work, to pass on her time; while we were out at our work.
She bought us a microwave cooker > We went out on late deliveries. now we could have a warm meal when we were completed

Thirteen years later she left, for her final resting place - They let her return to sat good bye _ "I will always be near, they said I could, but you won't see me again." she said >> then she was gone.

[Lisasview]

Oh my .. such memories.. sounds like she spent her remains days happy... and that is wonderful!!
read moreOh my .. such memories.. sounds like she spent her remains days happy... and that is wonderful!!
Lisa, now in Spain

[Wild Rose]

We brought some of her furniture & put her favourite chair in her room. for when she wanted to be alone.
We left her with some odd jobs (By request) while we went out to work; "I like to pull my weight"
Son got grandad's car, he said it was her car and took her out for rides >> To air shows, and things like that.