Hand-In-Hand

Hand-In-Hand

A Poem by Lisasview
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My very first Sonnet ever. This Sonnet is about the forever remembered love for a mother or grandmother. remembered.

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Hand-In-Hand....

Her tired eyes saw more than I'll ever know;
long silv'ry hair piled high upon her head,
the clean fresh scent of times so long ago ...
warm stinging tears are those I often shed.

Remembering her laughter through our years,
when we walked hand in hand along the shore.
As lovely sounds of church bells filled my ears,
my love still held by ocean's distant roar.

Now, fresh white, fragrant lilies near her lie,
a few soft petals fallen from the rain ...
their faces wet, turned up toward the sky;
along with them she takes rest from her pain. 

Sweet memories we shared now mean so much,
each day, I long for her caressing touch.

                                   ~~~
                                     

© 2022 Lisasview


Author's Note

Lisasview
A very special thank you to Richard!! Who saw this as a Sonnet (I had no idea what a Sonnet even was!!) and, helped me complete it. He opened up a whole new world to me.
Thank you,
Lisa

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This was particularly touching to me. I was the primary caregiver for my mother the last five years of her life. It was the hardest and most challenging task I have ever undertaken. Given the chance, I'd gladly do it all again. By her grave, I was almost too exhausted to cry. But I found great comfort in knowing her worldly suffering had come an end even though I know I will miss her until we meet again. Thank you for this, I enjoyed. F.

Posted 8 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

8 Months Ago

Thank you Fabian,
I am glad you liked it.
My plan is to rework my Sonnet so please loo.. read more
Lisasview

8 Months Ago

Hi Fabian, Just submitted my newest version of this poem and I also submitted one that I am working .. read more



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A poem of memories while going through grief and loss. Nicely composed Lisa.

Posted 8 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

7 Months Ago

Oh gosh I am so sorry not to have commented on your review.. I had COVID a month ago and fell far be.. read more
I miss my mum. She hasn't died, but she has dementia. Sadly the wonderful vibrant soul she was is no more. I grieve for the loss of her and yet she is still with us, albeit almost a stranger. Your lines remind me of all the wonderful times we shared before this cruel disease took her from us. I remember my mum's laughter, her sense of fun and her unconditional love for our family. Thank you fir sharing your work.

Chris

Posted 9 Months Ago


Lisasview

9 Months Ago

Good morning Chris,
Your review made me cry. I lost my mother to dementia and it was heartbr.. read more
Chris Shaw

9 Months Ago

Such a cruel disease Lisa. So sorry for your loss.
Lisasview

8 Months Ago

Thank you..
Just spend as much time as you can with your mother..that helps at the end.
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Gee
My mum hated us buying her lillies, "save them for when I'm dead" she used to say.
Another enjoyable piece Lisa


Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

9 Months Ago

My mother hated getting any cut flowers...she only wanted the ones in the pots to plant..Thank you f.. read more
Lisasview

8 Months Ago

Hi Gee, I just submitted my new version of my Sonnet.
Worked on it quite along time..Plus, I .. read more
Beautiful truly beautiful
Loved it
I miss my mum xx
Thanks

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your review Julie.
I think this made me think of my mother and how much I miss her.
I love the idea of the petals with faces turned up toward the sky....
quite a touching image.
j.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

9 Months Ago

Thank you so much Jacob for reviewing my poem. I appreciate the feedback..
This and Mothers L.. read more
Lisasview

8 Months Ago

Hi Jacob,
Well, I just submitted my latest version of Hand in Hand.. Worked on it for quite s.. read more
Hm?

Ah, Lisa 🥀
I think with proper iambic pentameter through every line, this lovely, heart-dancing poem could be made into a most wonderful English Sonnet … already, eight lines are in perfect meter; the rest would be easy to sort out, if you're the mind to. Let me know if I can help.

I also think you've the eloquent mind, heart, and soul of a true master poetess.
It can be so very-very painful letting go; yet, in the spirit as you say it, memories can be the warmest smiles of all.

Welcome, to the Café, Dear Poetess🥂
Hugs to you, Merry Christmas, and the Happiest of Holiday Cheer!
Come see me sometime ⁓ Richard 🍃

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Richard🖌

7 Months Ago

Lisa 💫

The changes you've made have woken this already wonderfully laid Sonnet so .. read more
Lisasview

7 Months Ago

Dearest Richard,
Thank you so much for your kind words.
With your help I have learned .. read more
Richard🖌

7 Months Ago

Lisa,

You are more than welcome.
All it takes is a keen eye to spot potential .. read more

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Added on December 20, 2021
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Lisasview
Lisasview

Benitachell, Alicante, Spain



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