Miles Apart

I wrote this poem when I was in my early 20's...In the 70's... Just a few things were changed, with the help of Richard. Rhyming Quatrains and Couplet

                

          Miles Apart....         

              Separated by miles 

              that keep us apart,

              my heart's

              still holding yours.

              Our love

              lingers-on,

              like the delicate web

              of an evil spider;

              the spider, but a toy 

              between us.

              Air hangs heavy

              between our hearts;

              still, longing for

              more time together.

              

              Yet,

              when I sit alone 

              thinking of you,

              your tenderness

              surrounds me 

                ... even now.

                    

                 ~~~

Reviews

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The warmth and spirit of a loved one remains with us even after they are long departed. We may not feel their touch any longer but as long as they remain alive in our memory the miles seem just that bit closer. It's a sad piece with your loss, love and acceptance of it here for all to read. Touching poem, Lisa. ⚘

[Lisasview]

Good morning Jamila,
I wrote this about 30 years ago.. Interesting to read the reviews and what was thought about my poem.. Thank you so much for your insightful review.
Lisa

[Lisasview]

So weird because when I look at it on manage there are just two..
I will look again... Thank you so much.. Really appreciate it.
Lisa

[Lisasview]

Sorry I was responding to someone else about the spaces between the artwork and the Title and accidentally sent my messages to you!
Lisa

[prema]

Pàñgs of separation is well written in this poem, Ñiçe oñe
Prema

[Lisasview]

Hi Prema,
Yes, I recall those pangs of separation even though it was so long ago.
Thankyou so much for your kind review.
Lisa, rather early in Spain

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Lisa,

This piece of your heart set to pen of page is yet another beautifully and splendidly written piece of memorable poetry that me thinks I may, I might, O' I must shelve as another favorite in my Writerscafe Library ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[Lisasview]

Wow Marvin...saying you must shelve my little poem in your library as another favourite is really such an honour!!
Thank you so much...
Lisa, early in Spain

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham]

I did, I done done it ...

[Lisasview]

Fantastic... Thank you again!!

Lisa, home now from a big lunch on the sea..

[Earl Schumacker]

Hi Lisa,
Your poem is beautiful and it is a fun read. I enjoyed it immensely. It is filled with images strong and solid and soft. Very enjoyable indeed. Have a wonderful day. Earl

[Lisasview]

Wow what a lovely thing to say!
I so appreciate it,
I will be reading yours soon.
read moreWow what a lovely thing to say!
I so appreciate it,
I will be reading yours soon.
Lisa, now in Spain

[Lisasview]

Hi Earl, a quick hello to say that I finally posted my newest poem Canvas of Dreams... I think you might enjoy it.
Lisa, now in Spain

[Lisasview]

Dear reader,
I wrote this title poem in 1970 when i was just 22 years old.
My thoughts about love have never changed...
Lisa, now in Spain

[CD Campbell]

That's the sentiment everyone could wish would be communicated from their loves. I get it, not everyone is capable of saying such things, but if someone wrote that to me, well, let's just say I'd be very thankful. Moving heaven and earth thankful. Your poem is romance. Loved it.

[Lisasview]

Good morning CD,
Thank you for reading and reviewing my little poem which I wrote in 1970 when i was only 22 years old. I am delighted to know that you loved my romantic poem!!
Lisa, now in Spain

[roarke]

Your metaphor in the second stanza is perfect. Your poetry style here sculpts so succinctly a long distance love/longing.

[Lisasview]

Yes, Rourke... exactly what I wanted to convey...
My poems can be so different from one another.. I should have suggested Innocence as it is really different and I am very happy with the metaphors I used.
Thank you for taking the time to read and review,
Lisa

[roarke]

I think its good your poems differ, that reflects creativity and a deep well of experience to draw from.

[Neville]

this is a little treasure .. I am glad I wandered in this direction this fair mane .............. Neville still thinking about popping to the gym this evening .... maybe :)

[Lisasview]

I could have sworn I responded to your very kind review as I read it a few days ago...but I must have forgotten to press send.. I remember laughing when you said that you were thinking of popping to the gym...maybe..
Anyway, saying that my poem is a treasure is amazing...
Thank you again,
Lisa, after 10pm and time for bed

[andrew mitchell]

Miles apart reflects a big difference between two people in love. Unfinished business or closure can linger until with time it softens . Another sad piece and a lesson learnt.

[Lisasview]

Good morning Andrew,
Thank you for your review..
I have a tendency to write about sad things...
I was only 22 (1970) when I wrote this...
Lisa, Sunday in Spain

[andrew mitchell]

I was 11 in grade 5 not a worry in the world, not a care, and didn’t know yet the impact of a broken heart or being in love.

[andrew mitchell]

It’s 430 pm here so it’s good afternoon.

[Someshwar Gurumath]

Dear friend,
even though you stay miles away, the feelings and art of narrating the poetry seems to be similar. It was really good one. Very metaphorically you've illustrated the emotions. Keep it up...

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
Going back onto my many reviews I see that I neglected to thank you for your great review..and i am so sorry!!
Thank you so much,
Lisa, Now in Spain

[Jacques - iNkwire]

I liked it! Reminded me of my own early love and loss... kind of a bittersweet treat.

[Lisasview]

I appreciate you reading and reviewing my poem..
Thank you,
Lisa, now in Spain