Canvas of Dreams

Canvas of Dreams

A Poem by Lisasview
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Posted my poem a month ago, then decided that it needed work. Only just now reposted it. The trouble I was having was with the tenses, but with the kind help of Richard I was able to figure it out.

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~ Canvas of Dreams ~


Staring at the ceiling ...

moments since he left,

faded light appearing

slowly, through satin curtains.


Muted colours changed,

grey to white …

the ceiling, my canvas

of dreams, is still there.


His smell, lingering in the air;

I stroke his pillow,

unaware he has returned

for another taste of the moment,

and to kiss me goodbye.


-·~*~·-

© 2023 Lisasview


Author's Note

Lisasview
Unrhymed Unmetered Quatrains.
If you happen to read my poem I would really appreciate a review.
I always review whatever I read.
Thank you,
Lisa

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I really like this, it just feels wonderful to read and imagine. She lingers in thoughts of him not realizing he is still there as he surprises her to show her how much he truly loves her. That was wonderful. It does feel as if it is part of mine, the perfect ending it seems. What I enjoy the most besides your use of words to create images is that those images are left up to the reader to design.
Ok, so I have one other, if you'd like to read it. It is a sonnet titled Summer's Sultry Heat.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much!!
Lisa



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I really like this, it just feels wonderful to read and imagine. She lingers in thoughts of him not realizing he is still there as he surprises her to show her how much he truly loves her. That was wonderful. It does feel as if it is part of mine, the perfect ending it seems. What I enjoy the most besides your use of words to create images is that those images are left up to the reader to design.
Ok, so I have one other, if you'd like to read it. It is a sonnet titled Summer's Sultry Heat.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much!!
Lisa
Beautiful sensual writing. As told by a lover and artist alike. There’s a gentle float to your words.
As an artist I’m always saying that using white is the hardest and best accent color. I thought of that seeing you write “grey to white”

Like

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Well, hello again... I was just saying you are welcome to the poem of yours that I reviewed and now .. read more
Blunt--Instrument

1 Year Ago

I use watercolor and gouache together a lot. Hence the white overlay sometimes. I love grey too an.. read more
Lisasview

1 Year Ago

I too am self taught as a painter and have been teaching water color for years.
I do like abs.. read more
The quietude is startling. Limpid. You've gathered together all that could be said. then illustrated for us in a single, bold stroke of emotion.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Oh Gosh Perry,
How did I forget to thank you for your very kind and astute review of my poem?.. read more
Perry

1 Year Ago

Ha! I struggle keeping track of responses. I know one thing for sure. Your writing is powerful, inti.. read more
Hi Lisa,
Aftermath of a loved one leaving and everything in the room becomes part of our dream, as his image become imprinted and his memories become engraved in every object. What a lovely little poem, it gives a reason to love what we have as it was shared by someone whom we have loved in abundance.
Thanks for sharing this gem with us.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Wow, what an insightful review...Thank you for taking the time to read and review. These types of re.. read more
Lisa , A very nice poem with strong visualisation and love smells
Love the art work , and word presentation ,

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

So glad you love my little poem... I too love the art work and enjoyed writing this poem.
Lis.. read more
Such a beautifully expressed poem, with words only in a dream can make. ;-}

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Hi there,
So sorry it has taken me a while to say tank you..but actually I just saw your swee.. read more
Weeping willow

1 Year Ago

Welcome ;-] a lovely write. I bet Spain is a beautiful place.
This is such a sweet, loving piece with a tinge of melancholy and bitterness. But it ends with a little bit extra of that sweetness, definitely leaving a smile on the reader’s face. The image you chose here perfectly evokes what you wrote, staring up sleepily at your ceiling with longing burning up your chest. ‘The ceiling, my canvas of dreams is still there.’ Absolutely beautiful line. Thank you so much for sharing such a wonderful piece.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Hi again, for some reason my responses to your reviews do not get to you??? I often look back and se.. read more
I think often, the 'canvas of dreams' we paint on demands they remain with us even after departing.... not sure I would/could leave again after returning for a kiss.... love pulls and entices, it haunts us during the day and at night.... what lovely colors we use to create that canvas.... soft and tender poem, Lisa.... thanks for sharing....

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Thank you for stopping by to review!
I do so appreciate it.
I am going to post to new .. read more
Oh I love this, I’ve had this moment before and never bothered to put it on paper…. Now I don’t need to, I can just recite yours ;) you did the moment justice! Well done ;)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Oh dear Pat how wonderful to know that you loved this!! I awoke one morning and was staring at the c.. read more
Patricia

1 Year Ago

I read it to my hubby and he said, “Awwww” ;D
Those are precious moments and deserved to.. read more
Lisasview

1 Year Ago

I often read poetry from this site to my husband...
Wow, you really must have liked my poem.... read more
You are a true artist. Your art is in everything you do.

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lisasview

1 Year Ago

Wow dear Cherrie, What a very delightful thing for you to say!!
I am so happy to know you lik.. read more

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Lisasview
Lisasview

Benitachell, Alicante, Spain



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I have been writing poetry and short stories since I was 10..so 64 years! I have never connected with any groups but recently thought why not.. So here I ..looking at where this adventure leads me. more..

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