Forevermore

Rhyming Quatrains with a Rhyming Couplet envoi poem regarding thoughts of death... Grateful to Richard for finding the perfect artwork for my poem and helping me along my journey writing poetry.

   

     Forevermore....

Lie me down on a bed of lavender;

naked, I will be in the blazing sun.

Upon death, to this earth I surrender …

for, my journey here with you is now done.

Remember my laughter in ocean's waves …

floating along with no care in the world.

As we hid inside of deep dark sea caves,

our eyes met softly, as blue waters swirled.

Kissing your salty neck, I held on tight

with loving thoughts....I drift to you again,

watching day's sun disappear into night,

knowing our true love's depth would never wane.

Beyond life, to your open arms I soar;

our souls entwine now ~ and forevermore....

Author's Note

If you happen to read my poem I would so appreciate a review.
I always review.. Each line has 10 syllables.
Thank you,
Lisa

Reviews

[Richard🖌]

One of your finest works, Lisa🍷

Whoever said sadness and death have no beauty, never read this.
It was great working together with you in formulating this creatively gorgeous piece.

Many memorable blessings shared … thank you always, Ma'am! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

Hi Richard,
Great to get a review from you. This is one of my most favorite poems I have written.
Of course I have been thinking of you….and even more in the past couple of days.
My plan was to message you… and, and I will…
~ Lisa

[Akinlolu]

You are ever the romantst. However this poem walks a tightrope between the physical and the spiritual. I see it as a majestic description of a love that transcends life here and time as we know it. A wonderful read.

[Lisasview]

Hello again,
Yes, you got it!!! This is a poem about my own death and still being with the love of my life...
Lisa

[Marlon Ferguson]

A great deal of care has been taken in this poem's construction and sentiment. A fitting and admirable epitaph for any well-lived life. Well done. Lisa!

[Lisasview]

Hi there Marlon,
Interesting that you would say care was taken in writing my poem, when in fact it just came out of me all in one go...The thought of not being here with my husband over took me one morning and i quickly scribbled down my thoughts...
I write all sorts of things.. Another one filled with metaphors is Innocence...E.P. Robles left me a very detailed review regarding that poem and it is exactly what I meant with my words... This poem was written with absolutely no corrections, etc.
All my very best,
Lisa, still in Spain

[C. M. Miller]

I recently re-read your poem. I am sorry now that I completely missed the pacing of it, the subtle rhyming that I overlooked upon my first read. The ending so subtle and sensual. Beautiful. Thank you, sincerely.

[C. M. Miller]

Angels folding wings around each other, with feathers to spare. Ethereal. Words escaping me, like a sweet mist kissing memories that never fade. thank you for this write.
UPDATE! 2-23-24: I recently re-read your poem. I am sorry now that I completely missed the pacing of it, the subtle rhyming that I overlooked upon my first read. The ending so subtle and sensual. Beautiful. Thank you, sincerely.

[Lisasview]

Wow, the mere fact that somehow my poem stayed with you and prompted you to reread it is well, rather amazing... Did you read my authors notes about the poem? Basically it said that I wrote this about thoughts of my own death...Hope you will have time to read more. And, I am now going to read yours,
Lisa, now in Spain

[Melinda McQueen]

How beautifully written is this.
Love lavender,
And your words made the aroma ever sweet.
Nicely penned.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much Melinda,
I too love lavender and here in Spain (I am from California) I have a lavender garden along with many other flower areas.
This poem is about thoughts of my death
Lisa, now in Spain

[Arundass TP]

Beautiful love poem. Much feelings in it. Enjoyed reading 👍

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my poem.
Yes, it is about love and my thoughts about dying,
Lisa

[carl]

lovely wording and structure and loving sentiment - glad I stopped by - have been trying to write of late using a syllable count - much more free with my rhyme but that is for lack of skill ( lol ) not intention. enjoyed you piece - carl

[Lisasview]

Nice to hear from you Carl... I have been sort of away from writing but I do plan on finishing up a poem soon and posting it. Glad you like this one.
Actually syllable count is quite easy... use your fingers and just make it 8 or 10 all the way through you poem...
Lisa

[carl]

Interesting you should recommend 8 or 10 syllables. My most recent one I used a 7 count. It seemed to have more of an unbalanced bite or edge which I hoped would fit with the subject. also chose to use an abcb rhyme scheme don't really know why maybe just b/c it was easier or it gave me more freedom with word choice.

[Lisasview]

Perhaps that is the case... Most of your poem was 8 or 10 so that is why I said that Carl,
Lisa

[fen]

this poem is so beautifully written, Lisa! i mean it, it is amazing and once i read the first verse, i just couldn't stop until the very last one. very comforting words, but also advocating to the roughness of nature, the contrast of love and death, light and darkness... thanks for sharing this with us!

[Lisasview]

What a fantastic review! I read this yesterday and thought i had replied... I do think I did but forgot to press Post Comment.
Thank you so much!