Forevermore

Rhyming Quatrains with a Rhyming Couplet envoi poem regarding thoughts of death... Grateful to Richard for finding the perfect artwork for my poem and helping me along my journey writing poetry.

   

     Forevermore....

Lie me down on a bed of lavender;

naked, I will be in the blazing sun.

Upon death, to this earth I surrender …

for, my journey here with you is now done.

Remember my laughter in ocean's waves …

floating along with no care in the world.

As we hid inside of deep dark sea caves,

our eyes met softly, as blue waters swirled.

Kissing your salty neck, I held on tight

with loving thoughts....I drift to you again,

watching day's sun disappear into night,

knowing our true love's depth would never wane.

Beyond life, to your open arms I soar;

our souls entwine now ~ and forevermore....

Author's Note

If you happen to read my poem I would so appreciate a review.
I always review.. Each line has 10 syllables.
Thank you,
Lisa

Reviews

[C. M. Miller]

Angels folding wings around each other, with feathers to spare. Ethereal. Words escaping me, like a sweet mist kissing memories that never fade. thank you for this write.
UPDATE! 2-23-24: I recently re-read your poem. I am sorry now that I completely missed the pacing of it, the subtle rhyming that I overlooked upon my first read. The ending so subtle and sensual. Beautiful. Thank you, sincerely.

[Lisasview]

Wow, the mere fact that somehow my poem stayed with you and prompted you to reread it is well, rather amazing... Did you read my authors notes about the poem? Basically it said that I wrote this about thoughts of my own death...Hope you will have time to read more. And, I am now going to read yours,
Lisa, now in Spain

[William Michael Reeves]

I hate to label this, but I can't help but think of your poem as a beautiful suicide note. She knows death is at hand, seems ready for it, maybe even welcomes it. Hopefully she is accepting of a natural death not intentional. Nice rhyme with world. It's one of the hardest words to find rhymes for, but so want to use it. I reacted with emotion when I read it. Means it's a good poem to me!

[Lisasview]

Hi Michael,
No not suicide...This poem is in regards to my own death...
Accepting it...as you say.
Yes, finding words to rhyme with certain words is often difficult.
Glad you liked my poem. Bringing the reader to emotion is always my intent.
Have you read my newest poem..Ballad? AWAKEN
I think you might like it..
I do so appreciate your kind review,
Lisa, having a cappuccino at 8am here in Spain

[Robert Trakofler]

What a sincere expression you penned! I often equate waves with motion in expression too. I have an obsession with waves of all kinds sound and light particles and colors so much can be reduced to and inflected by WAVES:) nice reminder for me to remember my waves!

[Lisasview]

Hi Robert,
This is so strange as I do remember responding to your thoughtful review yesterday, but today my response is not there? I am an artist and I have always lived by the ocean and now the sea. The water and its sound, colors and light really appeal to me.
Thank you for taking the time to read my work and to review it.
Lisa, now in Spain

[Robert Trakofler]

this site can be a bit clanky I tried to change my picture yesterday and now I'm a tree

[Lisasview]

Oh yes, I am often a tree...so weird..

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Joy and pain, life and death, love and sorrow always create a beautiful bouquet. Your words lovingly express a neverending love, and that's the way it should be. Well done.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for your very kind review…

[slfisher89]

wonderful melodic tone; I love the speaker talks or reuniting with a true love; after death. The poem also had a Dickinson and Poe feel.

[Lisasview]

Wow, what lovely things to say about my writing.
I really appreciate your reviews!!
Lisa, still in Spain

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Lisa... gorgeous poetry.... splashing with the waves...
sensual and melancholy... the feel of romantic rendezvous. softly, Pat

[Lisasview]

aLways, delighted to get a lovely review from you my dearest Pat.,
Lisa

[Sage88]

This is beautiful. This gave me goosebumps and put a smile on my face. Short and sweet while eliminating the scary cloud over death. I found this flowed nicely and most definitely gave me something to model after as I'm new to the poetry game. Although new to writing but am a long time admirer and reader of the art. Thank you for sharing your work. Much love.

[Lisasview]

I am quite new to posting but I have been writing for many, many years. I hid my work until last year.
I am so glad to have your review dear Sage and I will add you to my Friends...
Thank you for reading and reviewing.
You might like to read my poem Innocence... quite different from anything I have ever written. This one is full of metaphors.. if you read read may I suggest that you read my comments and the reviews on my work. This will help you understand the meaning..
All my best..
Lisa, originally from the USA but now in Spain

[D. Mansfield]

What a beautiful piece of writing.It's a topic I seem to connect with as it is the center of many poems. I am amazed, in awe, and just blown away that people with the credientials you all have, are on here, and reading a newcomer like myself, its very humbling and I appreciate you very much

[Lisasview]

Well, my very new friend... I have zero credentials!!
I only started posting my words one year ago... I have been writing for many years but hid my work..
Good for you for joining in...it is such a great way to get true feed back.
Lisa, now in Spain

[Brad Dehler]

Fascinating ability to work with the 10 syllables, within the quatrains and couplet rhyming. I had to read this one again :)

[Lisasview]

Thank you again for reading my words... This one is about thought of my death...
Lisa

[Brad Dehler]

Yes, sobering words. To wake up thinking about it, wow- that is a spent day in the morning. But this poem shows its worth the price

[Pete]

such beautiful sentiment and imagery - very reassuring. all is right no matter. could not help but smile as i read. impressive format and accompanying pic. all very tenderly assembled. not a bad way to start my day ... :)

[Lisasview]

Hi Pete,
And what a very nice way to end my day...reading your wonderful review...
Delighted you liked my words... writing about my own death may have seemed strange to many that read this...
Lisa, going for some red wine..