Whispers in the Trees....

Enjoyed writing this new English Sonnet.

          

Whispers in the Trees....

Sweet yearning whispers through night's silken haze ...

rememb'ring times spent full of bliss with you.  

Tears glimmering like brightest stars ablaze,

our knowing someday we will start anew.

No others' kisses ever need replace …

those luscious moments waited for are few;

ne'er thinking to forget your perfect face,

as rivers surely pass ~ I am still true.

Life's empty when you are so far away;

sun's lingering is warm, but never bright.

No scent from flowers, time turns dull 'n grey ...

my true love's missed throughout each sad-filled night.

Warm breezes waken wishful memories;

a tender heart hears whispers in the trees.

~-~·.·~-~

Author's Note

"Thanks go out to Richard for his tireless patience and dedication in teaching me the English Sonnet form, and the beautiful poetic language of Iambics." I am so very proud of this milestone accomplishment, the challenge that many of you might truly understand.

Reviews

[Perdition]

I read this line from line, taking the snails pace, which is how I believe you should read this poem. It should take you into a fog and leave you blind and seduced as it touches you without being touched. This is a loss and a gain from the understanding of love, well put frankly this is everything you want in a haunting, lovely love. Beautifully penned Lisa from Spain. I believe you earned that cherry. ;)

[Lisasview]

Good morning,
Delighted to read your review and know that you liked my poem and understood its deeper meaning.
I see you are reading many of mine… thank you so much.
Perhaps you might like Nymph
I really enjoyed writing it.
Lisa

[Perdition]

I am enjoying, currently writing though as that is what I do here in the "add writing" source...why? Have no answer reasonable enough to make sense..lol, but I'll be there soon enough and sending you a very good morning as well!

[Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn..]

Lisa's View,

Whispers In The Trees is a wonderfully written piece of Poetry that dost speak ever so gently to one's heart and proverbial soul ... Thank you, for sharing ...

Marvin Thomas Cox-Flynn de Graham

[divya]

A sweetly flowing sonnet of love and wishful yearnings, instantly uplifting the reader's soul, feeling one with delight. Kudos on the masterpiece!

[Lisasview]

Wow, to use the word masterpiece for my little poem is amazing!!! Thank you so so much.
I really enjoyed writing this one...
Lisa

[divya]

When a poem flows along with its words, it indeed becomes one, dear Lisa....
I really enjoyed it. You are most welcome.

[Gregory Lawrence Wilson]

Nevermore, ever forlorn -
alone

[Lisasview]

Yep, that's right!!!
Thank you for taking the time to read and review...
Lisa

[Pete]

those whispers echoing the longing. we hear them because we dared to love ... :)

[Lisasview]

Hi Pete,
I do so appreciate you reading and reviewing!!
Lisa, now in Spain

[William Michael Reeves]

I really like your rhymes. It felt like each compliment the other like yin and yang. I've often felt it's one thing to find the rhyme, but so nice when the two sound good next to each other. You did that well in this Sonnet. And in the volta you turn to the emptiness created by the fullness of your love experienced in the octave. Then beautifully resolved in the couplet. I love the love of your words! I do understand the challenge and the satisfaction of understanding iambic meter then applying it. Like a painter's perfect brush stroke or a musician finding that perfect phrase. Makes the mind feel all warm and fuzzy. Excellent poem Lisa ... there in Spain!

[Lisasview]

How lovely to wake up to your wonderful and understanding review of my Sonnet. Everything you said filled my heart and mind with inspiration to write more. This one took quite a long time to complete and is the last one I posted. This week my hope is to complete a couple more I have been working on.
Lisa, about to have a cappuccino ... 7am in Spain

[William Michael Reeves]

A little caffeine should help for sure! And writing Sonnets definitely requires the write chemicals. Right? Very happy to inspire you and look forward to new Sonnets from you. And somehow I need to find time to read your other new poems as well. Time is hard to catch. If only it were as easy as inspiration.

Bill ... enjoying an Americano in America.

[John the Baptist]

Few poetic styles can approach the sonnet when it comes to expressions of love. This is a very romantic offering tinged with sadness, for it appears the object of this love is absent. No specifics are given, but none are needed. The speaker will definitely be there when the lover returns.

[Lisasview]

Yes, dear John that is what makes Sonnets so interesting ..not giving too much and allowing the readers imagination carry them through the words.. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my work.
Lisa, early morning in Spain

[Scott Kris]

Beautiful writing and an “assignment” well accomplished.

The voice was unique and clear. I could almost hear a voice reading to me.

Thank you for sharing.

Scott.

[Lisasview]

Wow, dear Brad.. what lovely thing to say.
Words like unique are wonderful to hear.
Sonnets are difficult to write.. but i enjoy the challenge.
Lisa, now in Spain

[lightsong]

This is a perfect sonnet in all ways my dear, it flows flawlessly, with the tender wistful tune as a real Sonnet should be.

"as rivers surely pass ~ I am still true." this line hits and stands out of all the rest for me, it speaks of true and faithful love, and your amazing last line, warp it all in a Christmas warm feeling... the couplet of this Sonnet is exactly "great".

P.S, You are SO gorgeous swith your smiling face ✨

[Lisasview]

Good morning,
This is so so strange as I read your delightful review last week and did respond... but I see that my response was never posted... perhaps I am at fault for not posting it or waiting to make sure it was posted... So glad you let me know...
Sonnets are really a challenge... I always want to keep my original thoughts and not lose them while making a sonnet correct...
Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
I greatly appreciate it.
Hugs, your friend...Lisa

[lightsong]

Good and most beautiful evening my dear Lisa~

"I always want to keep my original thoughts and not lose them while making a sonnet correct"

THAT'S MOST IMPORTANT! I so understand You in this and thought/think about it. to lose my original touch while writing in forms specially for a difficult form as the Sonnet.

Thank You for replying to me here. and do keep challenging and enjoying your self writing Sonnets.

HUGS❤️

[willweb]

Whispers in the trees. Who wouldn't love that sound when sharing the breeze with the memories that wait patiently in our hearts. A beautifully crafted sonnet indeed. Very smooth and easy to read and the rhymes are fantastic. This is a complete story which makes it so much more appealing to the eyes and mind.

[Lisasview]

This was the last poem I posted... my life really got too busy about a month ago and I have not written anything since.
I am dying to find the time but....
Thank you again for reading yet another one of my works.
Lisa