Whispers in the Trees....

Enjoyed writing this new English Sonnet.

          

Whispers in the Trees....

Sweet yearning whispers through night's silken haze ...

rememb'ring times spent full of bliss with you.  

Tears glimmering like brightest stars ablaze,

our knowing someday we will start anew.

No others' kisses ever need replace …

those luscious moments waited for are few;

ne'er thinking to forget your perfect face,

as rivers surely pass ~ I am still true.

Life's empty when you are so far away;

sun's lingering is warm, but never bright.

No scent from flowers, time turns dull 'n grey ...

my true love's missed throughout each sad-filled night.

Warm breezes waken wishful memories;

a tender heart hears whispers in the trees.

~-~·.·~-~

Author's Note

"Thanks go out to Richard for his tireless patience and dedication in teaching me the English Sonnet form, and the beautiful poetic language of Iambics." I am so very proud of this milestone accomplishment, the challenge that many of you might truly understand.

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

'Life's empty when you are so far away;
sun's lingering is warm, but never bright.
No scent from flowers, time turns dull 'n grey ...
my true love's missed throughout each sad-filled night.'

that chosen quote from a wonderful piece of writing, yes, a sonnet, is more than visual, more than moving. Suxh love remains, come what may - forever.

[Lisasview]

So sorry to be late in responding to your lovely review of my work. I am still dealing with my broken clavicle so I am not on my computer as much as I would like to be.
Lisa

[lightsong]

This is a perfect sonnet in all ways my dear, it flows flawlessly, with the tender wistful tune as a real Sonnet should be.

"as rivers surely pass ~ I am still true." this line hits and stands out of all the rest for me, it speaks of true and faithful love, and your amazing last line, warp it all in a Christmas warm feeling... the couplet of this Sonnet is exactly "great".

P.S, You are SO gorgeous swith your smiling face ✨

[Lisasview]

Good morning,
This is so so strange as I read your delightful review last week and did respond... but I see that my response was never posted... perhaps I am at fault for not posting it or waiting to make sure it was posted... So glad you let me know...
Sonnets are really a challenge... I always want to keep my original thoughts and not lose them while making a sonnet correct...
Thank you for reading and reviewing my work.
I greatly appreciate it.
Hugs, your friend...Lisa

[lightsong]

Good and most beautiful evening my dear Lisa~

"I always want to keep my original thoughts and not lose them while making a sonnet correct"

THAT'S MOST IMPORTANT! I so understand You in this and thought/think about it. to lose my original touch while writing in forms specially for a difficult form as the Sonnet.

Thank You for replying to me here. and do keep challenging and enjoying your self writing Sonnets.

HUGS❤️

[willweb]

Whispers in the trees. Who wouldn't love that sound when sharing the breeze with the memories that wait patiently in our hearts. A beautifully crafted sonnet indeed. Very smooth and easy to read and the rhymes are fantastic. This is a complete story which makes it so much more appealing to the eyes and mind.

[Lisasview]

This was the last poem I posted... my life really got too busy about a month ago and I have not written anything since.
I am dying to find the time but....
Thank you again for reading yet another one of my works.
Lisa

[Michael]

The book of forms should never be opened lightly, for once opened you can never go back. I have looked inside and am doomed forevermore, lost to reality in a world of poetry. That said, I really like this piece! Some parallels with the lives of others who have been lucky to have loved and been loved. I will be reading more, Lisa.

[Lisasview]

Hi Michael,
What a kind and insightful review. Yes now that I have learned about forms I am most definitely hooked. Glad to know you will be reading more as your review is a real treasure..
Lisa, still in Spain

[Einstein Noodle]

oh yes, Lisa .. i for one do totally understand ;) ... classic forms .. esp. sonnets, demand our conscientious working and re-working .. scrutinizing every nuance and possibilities .. you should be proud .. the title actually drew me in .. i have old memories of an even older (must be dead) Taos Indian who whispered about talking trees .. he was most always quite drunk :) but i believed him .. and am certain he listened to and understood ... your poem brings out a calm wistful sadness in me ... we have loves forever gone ... but not ... well done ...
E.

[Lisasview]

As you already know my dear friend that it is a poets delight when something written ~ a thought.. provokes thoughts and memories in the reader.
I am so delighted to know you connected with my Sonnet.
Thank you a zillion times for reading and reviewing.
Lisa, yes now in Spain...forever

[softlyfall]

I love love LOVE sonnets. This is gorgeous. Perfect.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing my work.
I really appreciate it.
The first Sonnet I posted on Writers Cafe is Hand~In~Hand...I think you might like that one as well.
Lisa, now in Spain

[Betty Hermelee]

No one could ever replace the ONE you love, and all its soft sun kissed memories. Your writing is melodious and sensual, though we know your heart aches with distance from your loved one. Distance is painful, but your description of it is hope and cherished memories of what you both possess, even though the light is different and the scents change. Beautiful write Lisa.
Best, B
Glad to be back at the Cafe, loved the Azores and Portugal.

[Lisasview]

Seems so strange that as I go back again to my sonnets and poems I often find reviews that show I have not responded...I remember responding to yours but I see that my response never got posted! So let me say that I so loved this very kind review of yours dear Betty. You really understood what I was feeling when I wrote this...
Lisa, going now to paint in Spain

[Betty Hermelee]

Sorry for the delay as well, and you're very welcome!
Best, B

[Sami Khalil]

An admirable work dear Lisa in Spain; a collaborative effort of the (twain).
Beautiful and mesmerizing with a tinge of sadness.
I see what a beautiful country can inspire.
Enjoy Autumn!

[Lisasview]

Hi Sami,
your lovely review of a month ago only just now appeared. I wonder why that happens.
Thank you so much for reading and always reviewing!!
Lisa, still in Spain

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! All good. You are welcome Lisa in 🇪🇸

[Lisasview]

So cute..love the flag!!

[Sami Khalil]

Hehehw.......

[Lisasview]

Sami, are you having any issues with adding color to your words or sending messages?
I am...

[Sami Khalil]

Not that I know of. Best wishes.

[Stuart Munro]

Hi Lisa ,
as usual. Amazing poetry and artwork , I don’t anything about sonnets or lambics. But I do know
I’m reading a beautifully written poem , fav line , no scent from flowers , Time turns dull and grey 1

[Lisasview]

Good morning Stuart,
Thank you for your kind review. I knew nothing about Sonnets until this year and fell in love with learning how to compose a Sonnet. This Sonnet took quite a bit of doing to write... Really a challenge. I am onto a new one. I too love the artwork I found as it works so well with my work.
Thank you again,
Lisa, early morning in Spain

[Stuart Munro]

Thanks Lisa , you Sonneted Great , it’s really chilly here , this Friday morn , brrrrrr,, have a great day

[Richard Knox]

Lisa, this is a beautiful, wistful love sonnet. It hits perfect notes of imagery, emotion, language, meter and rhyme. Your talent for this form is a joy to behold! I fully appreciate how difficult it must be to write such a lovely, well-crafted sonnet. Perhaps someday I will have the confidence and patience to attempt one of my own.

[Lisasview]

Hi there dear Richard,
Thank you so much for your much appreciated kind review.
Yes, writing Sonnets does take confidence and patience... Patience I have...but not confidence, so when I receive a marvellous review...such as yours that does help build my confidence...so many heartfelt thanks to you!!
Lisa, going now to practice piano, Chopin

[Coyote Poetry]

So beautiful dear Lisa.
"Life's empty when you are so far away;
sun's lingering is warm, but never bright.
No scent from flowers, time turns dull 'n grey ...
my true love's missed throughout each sad-filled night"
I loved and I understood the above lines. Thank you dear friend for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
I am delighted that you loved and understood the lines.. This means a lot to me.read moreHi there,
I am delighted that you loved and understood the lines.. This means a lot to me.
Thank you,
Lisa

[Coyote Poetry]

Always my pleasure to read your work dear Lisa. I hope you doing well and you are having some fun.

[Lisasview]

My life is a constant adventure so I would say i am having fun.
I am so appreciative that you are reading my work...
Thank you again,
Lisa