Whispers in the Trees....

Enjoyed writing this new English Sonnet.

          

Whispers in the Trees....

Sweet yearning whispers through night's silken haze ...

rememb'ring times spent full of bliss with you.  

Tears glimmering like brightest stars ablaze,

our knowing someday we will start anew.

No others' kisses ever need replace …

those luscious moments waited for are few;

ne'er thinking to forget your perfect face,

as rivers surely pass ~ I am still true.

Life's empty when you are so far away;

sun's lingering is warm, but never bright.

No scent from flowers, time turns dull 'n grey ...

my true love's missed throughout each sad-filled night.

Warm breezes waken wishful memories;

a tender heart hears whispers in the trees.

~-~·.·~-~

Author's Note

"Thanks go out to Richard for his tireless patience and dedication in teaching me the English Sonnet form, and the beautiful poetic language of Iambics." I am so very proud of this milestone accomplishment, the challenge that many of you might truly understand.

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

'Life's empty when you are so far away;
sun's lingering is warm, but never bright.
No scent from flowers, time turns dull 'n grey ...
my true love's missed throughout each sad-filled night.'

that chosen quote from a wonderful piece of writing, yes, a sonnet, is more than visual, more than moving. Suxh love remains, come what may - forever.

[Lisasview]

So sorry to be late in responding to your lovely review of my work. I am still dealing with my broken clavicle so I am not on my computer as much as I would like to be.
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Yee doggies, Lisa!!! 😳

Thirteen reviews in only three days (so far) for this one … amazing!
But, why would I be surprised when so many seem to admire, respect, and enjoy your excellent brand of poetry.
Congratulations are in order for learning the complex and challenging language of Iambics required to compose a legitimate Sonnet … a poetic skill few ever master.
From title to artwork choice, theme, and the manner in which you've composed your story's moments in spot-on meter, rhymes, syntactic flow, color choice, emotive grip, metaphoric imagery, grammatical acuity, and presentation … I'd say you have here a virtual Sonnet masterpiece.

I know I (for one) have been truly delighted to watch your excellent poetic skills progress since you first joined us at the Café … KUDOS to You, Dear Poetess!

A most beautifully thoughtful contribution shared, Lisa, for us lucky Café members to enjoy and learn from.
With joyful hugs 'n smiles! ⁓ Richard🖌

[Lisasview]

Oh my goodness my dearest Richard what lovely things you have said in your review.
I am thrilled that I was able to actually accomplish this...but without your help teaching me what a true Sonnet is really all about I never could have done this. I so enjoyed the challenge and appreciate the reviews I have been getting. Yours brought tears (happy) to my eyes..Saying that I have posted a Sonnet masterpiece is..well...I am at a loss for words..(I know...unusual for me)
Thank you again,
Lisa

[Richard🖌]

Sincere,
My every word. 🌾

[Richard🖌]

PS: I think you should make your happy-go-lucky, sparkling thumbnail photo for this poem your Profile Picture/Avatar.

[Patricia Wedel]

Amazing words in a Cameo of feelings… on a Chain of Gold when Whispers fill the Heart 💜… tenderly, Pat

[Lisasview]

Hi Pat,
Thank you for your very kind review...I love your words "on a Chain of Gold"
Lisa

[Patricia Wedel]

Dear Lisa… I am impressed by Richard’s admiration of your Iambic Pentameter. Ii have just googled a lot of information about why Shakespeare loved that way of writing poetry. Amazing that it just comes naturally to you. I read that even Taylor Swift (a Pop singer who writes her own Songs (poetry) uses Iambic Pentameter. I will sign off now and say: Be still and listen to the Wind. tenderly, Pat

[Chris Shaw]

I really appreciate this English sonnet Lisa, because I know from experience the challenge that this form can bring. This is beautifully penned. Each line thoughtfully composed. Fourteen lines well accomplished. Good job done.

Chris

[Lisasview]

Hi Chris,
I am so happy that you understand what a huge challenge writing a Sonnet is...
read moreHi Chris,
I am so happy that you understand what a huge challenge writing a Sonnet is...
Thank you so much,
Lisa, afternoon here in Spain

[Temperance]

This is lovely, Lisa! I enjoyed it very much. Warm breezes waken wishful memories; a tender heart hears whispers in the trees. Love the last lines. So true. Thank you for this beautiful sonnet. Temp

[Lisasview]

Good morning Temp,
It is always such a pleasure to read your reviews.
I really appreciate you!!
This Sonnet was quite a challenge and seemed to take forever. I am excited about learning how to compose a Sonnet in its perfect form... Not easy but well worth the task..
Lisa, just finishing my cappuccino

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I would be an English patient before having the patience to construct a perfect sonnet.
this really feels like one...nice work, Lisa,
j.

[Lisasview]

First review I am reading early this morning with my delightful cup of cappuccino..and, laughed out loud...
Yes, believe me this was a huge challenge...but I am into learning the many forms of poetry...having never done so before. Sonnets are difficult but in the end I find them well worth it.
Thank you for your funny review..loved it.
Lisa, still smiling

[Red Brick Keshner]

I thoroughly enjoy the poetic strictures of each individual form of poetry and relish in both the thought and experience of such forms being applied contemporaneously with much considered thought as the challenges of language and antiquatedness are real and often feel cumbersome. And a few do succeed and shine while others will be completed but only justly so. This sonnet has made its mark both in structure and content. No mean task.

[Lisasview]

Wow, what an amazing review!!! Delighted that you throughly enjoyed my Sonnet. This Sonnet was particularly challenging and took me quite a long time to complete. I wrote out the poem draft with absolutely no problem but making my words into a Sonnet was not easy. I have only recently learned about Sonnets and really enjoy the form..Yes, you are correct.. No mean task.
Planning to write another one soon...
By the way...have you read my other Sonnets?
I have a few posted...For example Hand~In~Hand...
Thank you again...greatly appreciated,
Lisa, now in Spain

[Red Brick Keshner]

Yes, we have a thread conversation going on that post, if memory serves. And we revelled in the call of the roosters as the sun wiped sleep of its golden lashes.

[Lisasview]

Yes, your memory is great!!
Thank you so much,
Lisa

[supernova_thoughts]

A true love's kiss. That was a beautiful sonnet, Lisa. I hope people find their true love even in times like these.

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much for yet another kind review.
If one keeps an open heart then one will find true love...that is what I feel.
Best to you,
Lisa, now in Spain

[Fabian G. Franklin]

I prefer prose or free verse myself but that's because sonnets seem a thing of forced form to me. I've no qualms with rhyme or alliteration so long as it is tastefully presented and written with logical progression of thought and attention to the rules of syntax and grammar. Sonnets just seem an antiquated and outdated form of expression to me; even the wordage used in the construction. I like to read poems of the sixteenth and seventeenth centuries because they are relevant to their place in time. But I feel poetry that is written in this century ought to be as well. Your sonnet is lovely but the form feels forced and cramped into a style better suited to another century. I admire your efforts. I just think it's like driving a Model T car on a modern superhighway. And like Dylan wrote back in the sixties, "The times they are a-changin'." But if it suits your taste, by all means, have at it. Some people find joy in recreating antique forms and expressions. Others like "avant guarde" writing and the cutting edge of expressionism. I like writing that communicates clearly and simply with strong description and appeal to all the senses. But variety is the spice of life. Congratulations on doing whatever makes you happy.

[Lisasview]

I appreciate your review Fabian.
I write in many forms. Sonnets are a new form to me and I am trying it out. Did you read Innocence or Crying... ? Just two of many that are not Sonnets.
Lisa

[Robert Haigh]

A beautifully flowing sonnet, Lisa, with perfect rhymes! Bitter-sweet in content, but life is often so! A pleasure to read this poem!

[Lisasview]

Thank you so much Robert for your kind words. I always appreciate your review.
Lisa, light rain in Spain...we need it!!

[Gee]

How spooky that whilst reading this well penned piece your name appeared in my feed. Regarding writing in form, this something I could never do.
Well done.
Hope you are both well

[Lisasview]

Hi there,
I do believe that when one is open the energy flows and connections are made... Maybe spooky but also rather wonderful. Yes, Gordon this Sonnet so difficult to accomplish...so this one is the first I have posted in quite awhile....L