Absence

Absence

A Poem by Patricia
"

to love

"

 

Only in the absence of sound

Am I aware of my breathing

 

I take advantage of it

I neglect it and abuse it

 

I waste it

 

I want to give rise to it

 

I want my pen to give it sound

 

I want it to have layers

And movement as an earthquake

 

I want it to scorch the skies,

Boil the oceans,

Fill the air with gases

 

I want it to reverberate

Breaking down the walls of the multiverse

 

The silence begs for it

In your absence

 

But when you return

I can only manage a whimper

 

And my pen falls

 

Without a sound

© 2021 Patricia


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'I want it to scorch the skies
Boil the oceans
Fill the air with gases'

Such passion here. That's what we want our poetry to do. We want it to make a mark, for its presence to be felt.

I am reminded that I can only write when there is silence. When I can hear my own breathing, which I am hearing now.

Your voice is powerful Patricia and I am pleased to have stopped by. But when the noise returns, I for one struggle and my pen is found napping.

Chris


Posted 1 Week Ago


Patricia

1 Week Ago

Thank you so much Chris. These days my pen writes wild… at least this one is cohesive.
Hi Patricia, your pen is given an inspired voice in this most creative write. You sing with such eloquence as your pen writes powerfully down the page, painting such strong images within the mind. I love the content of this inspiring write. Hugs....Mike.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Patricia

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you very much! I was in a mood when I wrote this, took two minutes to write and then I was goo.. read more
shadrach hah

3 Weeks Ago

You are welcome. I totally agree with what you say. May the pen ever shine and write with such grace.. read more
But when you return
I can only manage a whimper
And my pen falls
Without a sound

Wow, so wonderful, such a powerful read here.

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Patricia

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you Kerry and nice to meet you.
So brilliant, I about fell over: "I want it to have layers and movement as an earthquake." This is amazing powerful writing that makes me want to write, to see if I could ever do something this emphatic. I mean, you are taking this pen & shaking it at the object of this message! I hope we'll see you posting more soon (((HUGS)))

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


Patricia

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you kindly, :) your writing is awesome, no comparison to my little scribbles. Glad you enjoyed.. read more
I find this a very moving, interesting expression of the difference between wants and reality, between how something feels inside and how it manifests and is perceived by others or even the self. The yearning is palpable, the frustration is audible, and the experience is poignantly felt. 5 stars!

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


Patricia

3 Weeks Ago

Thank you very much! Greatly appreciated;)
"And my pen falls/without a sound"
but not true...your pen rises and speaks in volumes...
and you do scorch the skies with the passion in your words, Patricia.
Multiverse that has gotten so many looks without a comment?
I am stunned and saddened by this.

j.

Posted 4 Weeks Ago


Patricia

4 Weeks Ago

Aww thanks j. glad you enjoyed it. No worries over comments from me, I quietly come and go myself bu.. read more

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Added on November 4, 2021
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