Ra's Champagne

spring morning

 

 

Goldfinches rise

as bubbles

 

from the bottom of a

champagne glass

 

in a race to reach

the crystal rim

 

swallowed into

the mouth of Ra

Reviews

[Betty Hermelee]

Always unique ! And a great metaphor, loved the bubbles and the finches riding to the top of….. the sun God; you are so clever; can I borrow some???
Lovely, B🌷🌷🌷🌷🌷

[Michael Sun Bear]

I was intrigued by the title; the two words did not, in my mind, go together. Then I read your poem. How very interesting, and brilliant using Ra. And comparing the rise of the finches to champagne bubbles was also great. Really a wonderful poem. It’s going into my Favorites library. I confess I had to use the internet to refresh my memory on which god Ra was/is. I am definitely going to keep reading your work.

[Patricia]

thank you Micheal, every once in a while I manage a decent poem, at least lately, a bit of trouble writing these days.

[Lorry]

What a delightful description of a spring morning. It almost made me forget myself and dare to dream of wearing only six layers instead of the usual 8! (God, I need a holiday!)
😃

[Patricia]

Thank you Lorry! You made me smile ;) It was a beautiful sight.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Love the reference to the sun god.
Those lucky finches...we are all finches trying to reach some god in the sky.
So much said in few words.
Nice to see you around again, Patricia. Have missed your writing.
j.

[Patricia]

Thank you j. it was a beautiful sight on a beautiful day. Glad to be back. New keyboard on my laptop and new battery and it seems to be working pretty good so far.

[beren]

Oh wow! What a poem! I loved this style of narration. I can taste this.

[Patricia]

Thank you Beren, glad you enjoyed it.