beauty

this was actually the first poem I ever wrote properly- bar school things...I was about thirteen and it was about the first crush I ever had on a girl and the confusion which arose from it

beauty is her head thrown back in laughter

her teeth glinting like pebbles in her wet ruby mouth

heavy golden hair dances against her shoulders.

her dipped doe-eyes laughing into mine 

beautiful prose trips out of that shining mouth

which melts into mine for a kiss

her thin frame fits perfectly into the substrate of my embrace

yet her angles jut out and hurt me 

just as her words occasionally do 

she is an angled angel,

a spiked starfish 

and a smooth electric eel

stinging.

Reviews

[TheAdamBryant]

nice love poem , and you were 13 when you writed this , impressive

[Pax]

beauty that stings. i like it.

[Gypsy Dreamer]

Whoa, I really like this poem. Were you thirteen when you wrote it or is it about being thirteen? It's written from an adult mind and only few adults could capture a girl/lady this way.

[misguidedpoet]

I may have been fifteen, I don't really remember, but I found this in my diary from those young years! Thanks though!

[Gypsy Dreamer]

It's absolutely beautiful.