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101

A Poem by paparapapa
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This is like a sequel to my poem "100 Days With You." So please read that first before reading this. Thank you. :)

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101

 

A hundred and one days,

Finally, I’m out of your maze.

But as my grays looked up so high,

Glistening, a tear’s stuck on my eye.

 

For hundred days, you made me feel,

That you, my dream, can be so real.

Between us, hardly a word was spoken,

But your eyes defied everything, heart was awoken.

 

But with just a snap of the world’s finger,

Forbid my feelings for you to linger.

Yes, you had a change of heart,

Your world, sadly, I wasn’t a part.

 

Now I ask you, did you have fun?

Toying my heart like a child’s water gun.

If yes, then answer this one little thing,

Can you say that a bit of happiness I did bring?

 

Well, for you, maybe it wasn’t intentional,

To make me feel as if I was someone special.

Your hands veiled my already poor eyesight,

Because now I know I’ve never been Ms. Right.

 

For hundred days, it had only been her,

The one who made your everything blur.

Tell me, oh tell me, can you still be mine?

I know I’m no her, but lie to me that it’s fine.

 

A hundred and one has come and gone by.

If this the end of nonexistent you and I,

Then make it easy, make me hate you so,

Teach me, my love, the art of letting go.

© 2011 paparapapa


Author's Note

paparapapa
It would have been so much better if you just said it straight...

The feel of this poem is totally different from the first one. So I'm sorry if you thought that this would have a happy feeling to it like that of "100 Days With You." Please do comment though. :)

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Both this piece and the previous speak of life, love and the roller coaster that exists with our journey's dynamic existence on this Earth. I don't think you could have set up either one any better or any different, for they capture time, your emotions, joys and frustrations and allow them to run across the silver screen of our minds.
The only suggestion I could make would be about the second line in the last stanza of this piece... It thought it might sound a bit better as, "If this is the end..." IDK.. just my opinion.
Over all both of the pieces were well crafted and clearly carried your tale to your readers.

Really good life Ink!
Aaron

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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This is brilliant, it really goes with the other one and i love the line 'I know im no her, but lie to me that it's fine' great poem!!!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

*claps* Bravo Bravo!
i love this just as much as the other
keep up the writes

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow so poetic and so emotional, I love it, nice write here!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I could make my tounge play with these words
i could feel them flow thru my lips...
Soft and yet so strong...
The irony and metaphors used honoured your poem with a soft touch of delicacy and embeded it with depht beyond any measure.
However i feel you can still improve on choosing the rhyming scheme.
Rest assured you got my soul reading it.
PS. The ending was good!

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

nice to read...impressive

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I really really love the last line
'teach me, my love, the art of letting go'

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

powerful but sweet...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can relate really well to this one. Its really sad when you've given up on a crush because you know it won't happen. but it might be better then continuing, even though you know it won't work. Either way, love is painful, but well worth it

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

101% touching stuff.. just hats off to your imagery..

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sorry. Whenever I see the need to write a
letter or a poem to the ex, it simply means
that you have not let him go.
If you had closed the door on this person, you
would not have to write about it. Write about
a new one, someone who can give you the
attention you deserve.
OK. I am in the minority. Everybody likes a
lost love story, a pursuit of the past.
----- Eagle Cruagh


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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