The Hand

The Hand

A Poem by penNhand

Pull or put down


Bite the hand that feeds

The bullets in the chamber

One after another

My life is in danger


I rose with the sun

Intending to set forever

Plan undetected

Better yet all so clever


I walk in the shadows

Shy away from the faces

Those people they live

I walk without laces


Flash bright as the sun

What a bright light I see

I could not bite the hand

Instead the hand bit me



© 2011 penNhand

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Interwoven with a divine balance. Well done! True message to be found within the words you paint. Thank you. :)


Posted 12 Years Ago

This poem has a nervous energyl, at least to me. I feel the danger, as if life may be ending soon, and that bright flash at the end feels as if I almost met my death. I feel as if I am walking in these shoes, the bright light startled me. Well done!

Posted 12 Years Ago

First: Thank you for the review~ I really appreciate it. :)

Amazing. I just loved the turn of the metaphor, creative and definitely unique.
Definitely invoked some thoughts from me.

* 100 *

Posted 12 Years Ago

Gives the reader such an impression of how much life is truly a balance! Direct and full circle...unexpected and holds such impact! xoxo

Posted 12 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This one makes me think about life's unpredictablilty. Thoughtful read.

Posted 12 Years Ago

A tough little poem,full of tempo.Nice to read something with a traditional rhyme structure.It works because it´s real.Good work.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Awesome poem. The poem to me has a very quick tempo that I enjoy. In the end I like how the hand bites back instead of the one in the poem biting it. Great job!

Posted 13 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It bites back, something one rarely reads about. Well, maybe, but not much in literature. I love the rebellion of the hand. Things don't go the way one expects them to.

Posted 13 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I absolutely love the juxtaposition of common phrases to create a new meaning/angle/viewpoint ... i.e. hand that feeds/bullets in chamber. That's what poetry's about. Good piece!

Posted 13 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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10 Reviews
Added on March 23, 2011
Last Updated on March 27, 2011
Tags: Suicide



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