Making Amends

Making Amends

A Poem by pheasant

Here lies the truth
As seen by one
His inner sleuth
Had jumped the gun

He opened fire
On precious life
Made her a liar
As if by knife

The dealings dealt
Swung like a fight
The feelings felt
Strung out the night

But now he see's
The scar and pain
Now says he please
There was no gain


He scrambled quick
To make things right
Threw down his stick
Resolved to write

He spoke of healing
Opened the door
Which found him kneeling
Low to the floor

The words were wrong
Or were they right
He sent a song
For her new plight

He turned the page
And pulled it out
He learned a sage
Can full deal doubt

With open arms
He let it loose
The note with charms
Which mentioned Zeus

The higher force
He trusted here
Would steer the course
And bring back cheer











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© 2011 pheasant


Author's Note

pheasant
Real feelings need be honored and respected

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It has a great rhyme scheme that you have been able to maintain throughout the poem, and unlike my poems, they do not seem forced.... they fit in perfectly... also the message is gr8. Keep up the good work. Thanks 4 sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


lovely and beautifully done :) the flow is great, but the message is better :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Forgiveness expression. Hard to come by, but when it's truly found it's a beautiful relationship between the people and the subject even with the memory scar. =]

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent flow and the message loud and clear. A hard road to amends and the ending holds hope...good work..

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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super rhyme and meter kept this engaging piece flowing perfectly

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Words can cut deeper than any knife and we would all do best to remember that before we say what cant be taken back great way of putting this

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Making amends are very hard to accomplish in a life. I like the flow and purpose of this poem. A very hopeful ending to a excellent poem. Thank you for beautiful voice of Mary Carpenter.
Coyote

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The movement between strife and healing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

In the view of recent happenings this is fitting :) ... but then again making amends has always been necessary ... at all ages at all time .. very nicely written and closed very well .
Good work .

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Even if it is sent too late, it is needed to heal the broken heart cut in half by the knife wielded by passion run cold...

This is a nice write my friend!
RLG,
Tommy

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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