dad...another word please.

the second installment to dad a word please. ties into the alcoholic series a bit. anyway the lines after "mum really needs you" is all of the words she said to him. shes a poet an didnt know it.

Shut up, sit down.

I’m in serious contemplations.

Should I really bother with this?

You’re enjoying the obliteration,

Of this compulsory relationship

Between father and son.

You treat me like a joke,

F**k you. there’s no pun.

Who drags their father,

Across London drunk?

You got CHD

You’re an idiot. Putting it blunt.

I even told you, discretion is advised

You’re not 20 anymore

You’re f*****g 65.

I don’t want to lose you

Mum really needs you.

I don’t want to be dressed in black

Shaking my head at your epitaph.

For god sake dad change your ways.

Defend your dignity,

Defend your integrity

For god sake dad change your ways.

Before the reaper himself

Makes his claim. 

Reviews

[That_Girl]

Not sure how I missed this.... I love it. Very emotionally upsetting but serves as a wake up call. Well done.

[nigrum homonculus]

thank you! he actually read it then shrugged it off. so much for a wake up call ¬_¬

[That_Girl]

Damn. Well good luck. I tried with my mom too.... May have to be a trip to the ER to do anything....

[Harley (arbiter)]

I like it man. I understand about how it fits the poem but I don't like the lines "before the reaper himself, makes his claim" of Course I have a different opinion on death so that's OK. Again Awesome work dude I still loved it

[The Watcher]

This is really touching and sad to think of this relationship between father and son. Wonderfully written

[nigrum homonculus]

thank you very much. thank you for reading.

[afra]

amazing ....such a lovely write ...good job

[nigrum homonculus]

thanks!

[Wild Willow Blue]

This is really gripping. I know it's not meant, but the lines "You’re not 20 anymore You’re f*****g 65," add a little bit of child humor to the piece, just a dull bit. Aside from that, the words pull you in and hold on tight. A great second installment.

[nigrum homonculus]

thank you! glad you enjoyed it. ah i see. didn't notice that. thanks for telling me!