Alcoholic pt 2

this is a continuation from alcoholic, first time writing like this....really really difficult, i don't think i captured the moment properly.

Metal,flesh,break,bones.

Steering wheel facial, foot on the pedal,

Windscreen crimson, painfully imprisoned.

Realising it,

Accepting it,

Fading

Fadi…

……

Waki…

Waking,

Gasping,

Stabalizing,

Intoxicated,

Motivated,

Invigorated,

Sit up, belt up.

Your day, not done.

Kicking, windscreen.

Smashed it, bleeding.

Crawl out, fall off,

Bonnet, bleed out.

Stand up, walk tall,

Collapse, hard fall.

Look over, liquor bottle.

Second chance, earned,

Lesson, learned.

Author's Note

i might do a pt3 as rehab and realisation. what do you think?

Reviews

[Wild Willow Blue]

I love the style in which you wrote this piece. I absolutely love the "Fading Fadi… …… Waki… Waking," lines, they just bring the feeling of all these words together. I think a pt3 would be ideal. I like the idea of a rehabilitation.

[Dez H.]

Yo dog that poem is the s**t. drinking and driving accident, that poem is the truth.
Good s**t.

[Rachael Day]

I love the way this is written! I think you did a great job of capturing the moment. It has a great flow and i'd love to read the next part so yes! write part three!!

[Melody]

This is a very interesting style. I like it. I certainly think it would be cool if you did part 3