Where i'm from

there was a shooting on my road last year. i remember very well the scene. i just don't get why people do these things.

                          

A little ponder from a street of bother.

This life I live is rife with trips.

To and from the afterlife, the aftermath of bloodbaths.

Shotgun shells, his life now frail.

So fragile, so delicate. His chest opened like a waterwell.

Yet people have the heart to say this is justified

His bloods on the pavement.  The situation amplified.

To say this is correct, morally an physically.

I simply shake my head at that flawed philosophy.

To kill for the thrill, because boundaries were ignored.

I would love to see a badman do that on a real life army tour.

But where im from this is daily, Like a snake in high grass.

A life ends every day, because some youth has no class.

Sniper rounds to mac 10s. this isn't call of duty.

The graphics are real now, so show some humility.

Reviews

[Michael G.]

Sad but true on how society seemingly becomes numb to such brutal and senseless killing. And I'm afraid until it actually happens to them or very close to them, there will be a lot of youth ending their lives in this fashion.
Good write and few grammatical errors, easily fixed.

[SHEEMA HUQ]

You write so well, the image also reinforces the - smart- aspirational-power elements associated with carrying weapons and your writing compensates by providing imperative and thought provoking commentry. Thanks.

[Fabio_Cassilias]

Preach, we need more knowledge for these kids on the street.
It is true, evrything u said in that poem.
i've lost some good friends through some senseless shootings it's quite wrong and horrible!very Nicely Written keep up the good work.

[Paul R. Watson]

This is great! I love the rythm you create and the last lines hit me hard. Only correction i saw was a im instead of a I'm

[kayla]

Wow. This is really beautiful, and definately true. Society is becoming very desensitized to violence and death, which is extremely sad and also disrespectful. I loved the last two lines because it truly brought the point home. Keep writing, and stay safe. (:

[Harley (arbiter)]

This was great! Really captures the scene. Good job!