Suicide Note

A sonnet dedicated to my past love...

 

Farewell to the woman I once adored:
Gone were the days that we’ve spent together
And the nights when, to the stars, we have soared
For death and darkness carefully linger.
I love you more than anybody could
But you betrayed my precious love for you
For my passion you never understood
And this you never believed to be true.
So, leave with the man that you have once dreamed
And forget the memoirs of wasted time.
But, though from this grief, shall I be redeemed,
Remember this shall always be your crime.
          So long to the sun that will never shine.
          So long to the love I offered to thine.

 

Reviews

[Fran Marie]

Oh the indepth languish of misery and heartbreak of love when betrayed

A well crafted sonnet of tearful and downcast fellings~I would Change the word did to have in the 7th line so it reads ~you have not understood~

Love your ending couplet ~ Shakespeare must be smiling down right about now~ On

This Exquisite piece~THanks for submitting to Sonneteers/ Tears Contest~

Fran Marie

[Tamme]

The betrayal and ultimate act of vengeance. To let someone live on knowing they caused a death. I like the form you choose also. I love sonnets, both writing and reading them.

[Sarah]

I love your sonnets! This was written so elegantly and reminiscent of the true romance that sonnets themselves embody. =) You write of a tragic tale, and the emotion is captured well in your words ~

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

*sigh* Such a sad poem, yet I'll admit that it's very well-structured. Although I'm not too crazy about the usage of "Shakespeare" type of words (in the final line, you use the word "thine"), your word choice was actually very good. It sure as hell kept me reading. ;)

As for content, very dark. It reminds me of a classmate of mine who committed suicide when he girlfriend dumped him... Anyways, this doesn't seem like a suicide note, but it passes excellently as a final thought. ^^

Thanks for posting this! I enjoyed reading it very much. :) The pic you posted really set the mood... magnificence and creativity in death. lol

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood