Constellations

A sonnet written for a girl in my dreams...

 

I make my works under the stars that shine
Glistening in every letter I write
Resembling the face I want to be mine
In every constellations in my sight.
I have seen the stars that formed Aquarius
And images that gods put in the sky
But my princess stands out there as my muse
In the darkness of the night as I lie.
But as I long for you, I realized
That the stars are lightyears away from me
And before I reach it, I may have died
Just like the distance between you and me.
          So, I wish that the night would never end
          To see you in the beauty that they lend.

Reviews

[Emily Rose]

This is very sweet and your longing really comes across. You do a good job staying in such a rigid scheme, too. I have one small critique, however: the couplet at the end doesn't make a whole lot of sense to me. Is the plural "they" referring to the stars? There is nothing plural in the couplet, so I'm a little confused why the night is referred to as a "they." Otherwise, this is good - the imagery is fairly strong, and I've got a weakness for poetry that uses celestial imagery. Good job!

[pattimari]

This is well written poem described so well and offers a vision into your longing. Well done. I especially like the very beginning which pulled me in to read more. (Glistening in every letter I write)
Come check out my Grown up Child poem.
Nice poem. I liked it.
Pattimari

[Sarah]

This is truely beautiful. The rhyme sounds so natural & compliments the romantic tone of this poem. I love the imagery of the night sky - particularly the specific mention of Aquarius ('tis my sign!) & the line "And images that gods put in the sky" Really powerful! Great job. =)

[Traces]

Very nicely written, I enjoyed the deep passionate longings in this piece of work. Holly

[Fran Marie]

That the stars are lightyears away from me
And before I reach it, I may have died
Just like the distance between you and me.
So, I wish that the night would never end
To see you in the beauty that they lend.

An exquisitely crafted Sonnet with beautiful poetic expression

love how you off set the ending couplet in this lovely piece~

WeLL DonE!!~ Fran Marie

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Quite lovely - the notion of looking for that love in the darkness - I hope your muse will bring you the shining of the stars every night as they seem to soothe you. Thank you. Quite exquisite.
Light,
Siddartha

[Antonionioni]

That's lovely - well done. I've just noticed there are other sonnet writers so I hope to see more of your work!