Naked

in more ways than one

And there I stood in all my glory

But it didn’t feel like any kind of glory I had ever felt

No, this felt like shame, exposure, pain!

With the addition of the sun shining directly onto my skin

Highlighting everything I had touched, eaten and drank in a lifetime

Now I wished I hadn’t a penchant for cream cheese and chocolate coated buns

Vodka and Pinot Noir!

Even the dust particles prancing in the air as if awaked by the rays of the sun

Thought better than to settle on me!

I tried to cover what modesty I had left with two awkward hands which had suddenly decided

They no longer where related.

My hair fell over my face as I lower my chin as far down as it could physically go without

Causing serious damage to my neck

I tried to see through the strands covering my eyes but with no hands left to move it

I had resorted to blowing it through my bottom lip.

No glory was to be had, No fanfare or ticker tape

Only your smirk comforted me

And pitying eye brows

I smiled, concave but still a smile

And suddenly I was wearing something....

Reviews

[Joseph Eluzai]

That chin lowered says you want to wear something. A profoundly simple write.

[aneeqa]

I believe dat actual creativity is when one describes huge phenomenon by relating dem with the simplest and everyday examples of life..... such a creativity cud be sensed in wat you wrote.... keep it up :)

[SkinlessFrank]

i am always impressed by your penchant for using simple statements and straightforward thoughts to weave together complex things so that they become so clear...clear in the "oh yes, that it what it is all about" way.

[Poetic Justice]

thank you..I wish I could make my life as clear as my writing! Oh yes that's whats its all about would be a lovely expression to come out with.. I tend to have WTF life!!!

[Rikkevi Rue]

just wrote a long review here and when I pressed "submit" it disappeared! haha, so you get a shorty now ;-P

I like your simple prose, I love your similes, you accurately relate how it feels to be naked (physically and emotionally) and at the same time conjure the injustice of being judged against a standard not particularly valid...ie, why not be judged on ones physique when considerably prodigious...sharp cuts, high points and curvaceous facets prevail (15-20 yrs old or maybe as old as 40 for those of us who were lucky!) or be judged for intellectuality while in the prime of our sagacity rather than in our developmental infancy! But alas that is seldom the case...

By your simple yet adept portrayal deep thoughts you conjure. Always a pleasure to read you PJ!

[Poetic Justice]

I have done that so many times.. this is metaphorically how I feel at the moment.. exposed! Thanks once again for your review. I think as we judge with our eyes before anything else because I believe its instinctive. Unfortunately we are no longer cave dwellers and a little more substance comes into play in our modern society... writing leaves me naked and exposed.. but at least I don't have to worry about the cake! LOL

[Rikkevi Rue]

haha! Girl you are humorous for sure! Well I know what you mean. I guess I am more on the guarded side and don't really say too much about what I feel. I write about my analytical concerns and endeavors but now about my emotional ones...I guess I just have too many secrets and can't deal with the consequences that would ensue if I aired them! I don't know if I'm sage or chicken! Lol. I was going to write a tell all kind of memoir but decided to spare my children! But then there is a lot about my life that is veiled. I should be wearing a veil like yours! ;-)

[Poetic Justice]

well I dare you to write something with emotions involved..and I will try to write someone analytical.. My kids know everything about..poor tortured souls!

[Rikkevi Rue]

that sounds awfully like the kind of challenge that starts a bunch of troublesome adventures in your typical mystery novel! I will consider it. The last time I decided to write in response to your provocations (some piece you posted on here about Hollywood movie industry types) it got me started on something that turned out SO good I didn't dare post it and began writing it into a screen play! But I'll entertain your idea and perhaps surprise myself...and a few others! ;-)

[Poetic Justice]

Oh I was waiting for that piece! I'm going to email you!!!

[Rikkevi Rue]

Sure go ahead. Curiosity, satisfaction and all that! I can use all the enticement I can get in any direction as far as writing goes...not motivated enough!