fam geil

fam geil

A Poem by chloe cruz

The steps I took,
I thought you'd take.
The heart that shook,
I thought you had made.
You see this alternative place we stand?
That is where you take my hand-
oh, the envy that I face
when I seek a town in which you'd leave.

© 2012 chloe cruz


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Emotionally driven. It clearly says that fairy tales don't always have happy ending. You have an excellent flow of speech in a premeditated fashion. You're good at writing in a formal metrical pattern that easily contrasts thoughts expressed in different units. Good job.

Posted 9 Years Ago


This wonderfully written poem seems to speak of regret and nostalgia, and also an intense longing... Is that right? I really enjoyed this poem; it really speaks to me. It sounds a but like a romance that never was, which I know first-hand. Great poem!

Posted 9 Years Ago


heartfelt and melancholy to the point of letting go, and idea becomes reason
to move on, beautiful meaning that speaks of life and memories. excellent

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on May 11, 2012
Last Updated on December 12, 2012
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chloe cruz
chloe cruz

Portland, OR



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i'm a really ordinary person, besides a few quirks. talk to me or whatever; i dig ravioli, cult films, errthang stephen king, neat glasses, and people. lez talk. c: more..

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aching aching

A Poem by chloe cruz



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