Sun and Moon

Sun and Moon

A Poem by PoemsbyPatrick

The sun in all his fiery brilliance,
Rises with the day.
He rules the waking hours,
In most, but not all ways.

The moon in her glow,
Captivates the night.
Her shifting silhouette,
Waxing and waning through her flight.

The moon appears in daylight too,
To taunt her lover sun.
Her mystery does tease him so,
His solemness undone.

The sun shall never rule the night,
Or enter in its space.
The moon does not invite him there,
To shine upon her face.

Their love is seldom consummate,
But when in fullness due,
The moon consumes the sun's fierce blaze,
And darkens out his hue.

The sun is proud and steadfast,
In his manly power,
But 'tis the moon's soft orb and form,
That dominates the hours.

© 2013 PoemsbyPatrick

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Wow. Beautifully sculpted. I love the personification. Great job. I'm shelving it! :D

Posted 9 Years Ago

A beautiful poem about the moon and the sun. Many good myths about the dance of the moon and the sun. Most times a sad tale. Hard for the moon and sun to stand together. A eclipse allowed the moon to control the sun for a moment. No weakness in the outstanding poetry.

Posted 10 Years Ago

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I have always really enjoyed the personification of the son and the moon. It tends to feel like a timeless thing to do.

You gave an interesting take on the genders here. I tend to agree with you. No matter what, the woman tends to have power that is not initially evident. She is smaller, weaker, throughout history, her roles are different... but there was alway power held by the woman and that is something that history books have rewritten.

I like this poem I fell into completely. I have no critique to offer.

Posted 10 Years Ago

The balttle of the sexes visualized well here. Ha. Liked the write Patrick.

Posted 10 Years Ago

a good idea well executed..The moon certainly is most mysterious

Posted 10 Years Ago

loved it....interesting concept...flowed well, very descriptive, very well said...super.

Posted 10 Years Ago

beautiful pictures lie within this captivating write. and i love anything which does justice to the waxing and waning of my ruling star. well done, poet!

Posted 10 Years Ago

Classic, timeless, beautiful! You've captured the ying and yang of gender, mythology of the skies, cyclical rythms and shared an enticingly beautiful and sensuous poem. Thank you for sharing!

Posted 10 Years Ago

I love the fact you're one of a few who calls the "Moon" her, as litteraly it is la female Luna, out of latin, so thank you second, your write is beautiful...
You wrote my perfect love story ever, so I'm greatful to you, now it's up to your imagination which one I was... some know others don't... great writing dear poet!

Loved it!


Posted 10 Years Ago

This was so amazing that all I can say is wow. Utterly beautiful :}

Posted 10 Years Ago

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Shelved in 2 Libraries
Added on November 5, 2012
Last Updated on February 13, 2013
Tags: Poetry, sun, moon, dominance




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