Winding Road

A poem written for Poetry and Lyrical challenge group. Title Winding Road. Topic dark winding road.

The darkness looms on ahead
A curving road with dust
Now slowing down the gust

For thinking is now clouded
With memories of the past
The loving did not last

A blackness does invade
As gravel bumps under tires
Love a heart's desires

Spinning out of control
The breaking glass in shards
Car left broken and marred

Gleaming headlights shine brightly
Now showing the distant way
but refusing, the heart stays

Shrouded in a numb aching
With sadness it does sink
Brain declining to think

Darkened love causes the crash
Heart completely broke and lost
Feet frozen in place like frost

Listless and utterly numb
Life begins to move on
With passion never gone

Leaving the winding road
Car abandoned there
Mind moving forward with care

Life will never be the same
His face deeply engraved
Soft warming touch always craved.

Reviews

[Dream Weaver]

This is on the money...loved it :))

[Dana Kathryn]

This is wonderful!!! Made me cry good tears...I understand this pain sooo well! Awesome job!! :)

[The Water Queen]

Both love and sadness in one poem. Hard to colaborate but you did this perfectly. This is a beautiful poem that brings a tear to the eye. Great job.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing. You took me with you on the winding road. I like the story and the ending was perfect. A outstanding poem. thank you. Always feel good to find the place of peace and safety.
Coyote

[alesuriko]

Very nice. I really liked the tone of this piece, the flow could use a little work but I enjoyed the perspective and the idea with the road and the car. Nicely done, good rhyme as usual. There are two lines that aren't capitalized at the beginning "but refusing, the heart stays" and "leaving the winding road" I don't know if this was purposeful or not, but it distracted me for a moment from the poem. The imagery behind the car is what I liked most about the poem, really well formulated.

[Art]

Your poem is nicely expressed with love in a turmoil you still leave the ending with that longing even when all is lost...

nice...

[Ethan Paz]

Perty good I gotta say. Pretty sad, how the character was thinking about love than ka-boom. Negative thoughts can bring negative consequences, however, this person was just unlucky. Good job here, poetic beauty.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

That is a great metaphor, comparing love gone wrong with a car crash and the dark winding road as love's unpredictability.

[Tate Morgan]

A dark write I think it would be more personally touching if it were a bit shorter I find to the point even very short poems can be beautiful .Nice poem

[The Analog Kid]

Well done. This is the way I like my emotional writes!