Dear Ice Princess

this is a poem in a letter format

Dear Ice Princess,
 I seriously care not what you think
I learned along time ago to say what you feel
To be honest with you, my anger is on the brink
Of hitting you severely in the a*s with my heel

Oh, I understand your message and concern
But I'm not the treacherous lying one here
There are many hidden things you need to learn
But frankly, teaching you isn't my place, dear

My message is purposely vague and confusing you
But reality check, your feelings mean nothing to me
Irritation is the feeling starting to brew
You're blind, open your eyes, and truly begin to see

I'm not the one crossing lines with leaps and bounds
But you wouldn't believe the tale even if I told you
For it would rock your foundation, the truth confounds
For in a million years on this you wouldn't have a clue

So to conclude go away, leave me alone
I'll keep my stupid promise, boundaries will be kept
Just know true patience with you has been silently shown
For reality and the truth you'd never see or accept

Sincerely,

The one whom you feel threatened by

Author's Note

any idea and thoughts are welcomed. be honest I can take it.

Reviews

[emmajoy]

Seems there is more than one justified complainant in the Cafe!

Love the style in which you've written this and the gentle power of your words, they make a point in the most literary of styles. You more or less defend and attack at the same time, clearly and pretty smoothly.

[Marie Harrison]

Ha! You were a little hot under the collar
Enjoyed this write

[OT]

I really like this!! and I like the idea of a letter-poem as well - quite unique!! you've done it well it has a strong message in there too, and I like the rhyme scheme!! (but then I do like rhyme in general ;)

[The Perfectionist]

I think all of your poems are forever going to vex me. You write well, and in this case especially so because I found this VERY amusing, but you insist on conflicting your rhyme with your rhythm and it irritates the crap out of me. You may be better suited to free verse.

[E.H. Monroe]

A strong message for sure, but clearly if you're going to chuck 5 stanzas of rhyme at some cumclown she has to mean more than you are putting across. If anything, flip the b*****d. The format is thus: Yeah what you said was s****y now I'm gonna bury your a*s like a casket.
The rhyme scheme almost gives it a dainty quality, like yes I am still a woman and i'm going to use these lines to s**t on you...in public...wearing read heels.

Good on ya

[Rachel U.]

First stanza typo: "along" - "a long"

I loved the format of this, firstly. I was a little disappointed in some areas, because it could be so rhythmical at one moment (as in, I could literally hear it in my head without having to struggle to figure out the flow vocally), and the next I would be given a kick in the pants by a line that didn't fit as well. Read through the poem out loud to determine where these areas are. The line //But reality check, your feelings mean nothing to me// was the one that stuck out to me the most.
Otherwise, this has some excellent content. I definitely laughed at parts. There was a certain amount of dry irony that made this most enjoyable. C'est excellent. :)

Mm...today, 9.5/10

[Tim]

I'd hate to run into you on a dark night! LOL Wow, that's telling her. I thought it might be about someone online on this site. It sounds to me like an old boyfriends new girlfriend but I could be wrong.

[SpokenWord]

I like this one as it is detailed but still leaves a lot to the imagination. This one is smooth, it is calculated, strong but said so politely that you can hear her getting slapped across the face. The ending to me represents a double threat as she feels threatened by you and she should also feel your threatening her all at the same time. Excellent write.

[Ice QueenJen]

Oh this was great, and I used to know a person like this. She has even threatened me with bodily harm,lol. But I loved the lines: " So to conclude go away, leave me alone
I'll keep my stupid promise, boundaries will be kept" thus showing whoever she is will remain between you and her; and that you will put this behind you even if she wont!

[KAREN]

Words that cuts the soul! I like it!!