Breakfast with Sam OT

Breakfast with Sam OT

A Poem by Poetic Beauty
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this was done in simple fun for Crowley Breakfast with OT. Loosely based off Dr. Seuss book Green Eggs and ham

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I do not know what are green eggs and ham
Said Sam OT that is who I am
I have not seen them on a train
Nor have I seem them on a plane
I have not tasted them on my tongue
Their color makes me want to run
They look like mildewed eggs
Causing shakes to begin in my legs
Can i please have toast with tea
Was his simple inquiring plea
We do not serve plain toast
Only with green eggs, was her boast
We don't serve tea unless with ham
Now eat your dish or scram.

© 2011 Poetic Beauty


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A nice re-write on a old story. I like how you told the tale. The movement of words made the poem fun to read. Never eat anything that is green that is a food. Except for a few vegetables. A very good ending to a excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


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It's a cute idea, but one thing that Seuss had that you don't is rhythm. The syllables in this are just all wrong. Almost all of your pairings aren't even close to what they have to be. You need that rhythm to read this through and to keep it light and funny. The words are amusing, but sacrificing structure for rhyme just shoots yourself in the foot.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Ha! Very cute. Loved your version!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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your way or the high/low/road-way... control, I'm right and you're - everyone else... chuckling here.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Great fun! Love visualizing food that makes someone want to run away. Dr Seuss is my favorite, it is rare that anyone can rhyme so well, but you have done it today.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Dr. Zuess Rulz and so does this :))

Posted 12 Years Ago


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lol, green ink.... just eat the dang eggs... hahaha
Jaunty, Suess is lookin' for his spatula and fork....
fun stuff.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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a wonderful rewrite of one of my favorite stories.....excellent!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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This is a profound work that deserves much more attention than this. You have composed such strong and fantastic words that slant toward truth and really how I feel.

Posted 12 Years Ago


A great tribute to the late great doctor and the in your face here and now OT. He would order plain toast...all his creativity goes into his writing leaving no room for an awesome breakfast. I'll even bet he's supermodel thin. Great write, loved the humor and lightheartedness.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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hmm needs another syllabble or two..."Now eat your dish or oshkabibble ...scram."

hehe




Posted 12 Years Ago


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Poetic Beauty

corn country, IL



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