I paid my dues

sonnet in Iambic terameter

 

 I paid my dues.

 

I’ve loved and won and loved and lost

and never stopped to count the cost.

For love’s a gamble you must take.

There is no choice make no mistake.

An age old question, ever new.

Which sometime will be asked of you.

Will you wager on happiness

and bet your life upon success.

Or are you too afraid to try

and let your chances pass you by

Then when you’re old and grey and bent

.How bitterly you will repent

the opportunities you missed.

You can’t remember being kissed.

 

12-Jun-08

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

Or are you too afraid to try
and let your chances pass you by
Then when you're old and grey and bent
.How bitterly you will repent
the opportunities you missed.

Oh yeah this can go for a lot of things. Love being the hardest of all of them after one has been burnt once or twice. Great poem!

[BenightedWhispers]

That was amazing! Great job. Just one thing though.
"Then when you're old and grey and bent
.How bitterly you will repent" You might want to place that period after bent, but I don't know. I'm an inexperianced writer.

[Ray Hamilton]

Well how true
I certainly have paid my dues over the years
I would do it all over again, ok maybe with a couple of omissions!!
I enjoyed the write Ray { Not a poet }

[WordMaster]

A smile was produced upon my face upon reading this wonderful poem
This is delightful,
I will try not to ever miss an opportunity to be kissed!

[Treasaigh (The Solitar..]

Wow this is amazing! Very wise. Feels me full of thought. I've tried. I was taken to the highest peak..shown beauty..then I was pushed down. The fall hurt my soul..my spirit. But I'm in the valley now..wandering. I'll stay here till I feel complete again. Thank you for sharing this poem. I love it. Great write!

[Samuel Dickens]

A kind of elaboration on the saying "Tis better to have loved and lost than to have never loved at all." Love is very risky business, but I always just marched right into the lions jaws, sometimes knowing I would get bit. Exceptional word-craft as always, Poeticpiers

[Greg the Bard]

This is well written and a great read. The read lends itself to a slower pace than most but it has an image all its own. Myn favorite lines are,"For love's a gamble you must take. There is no choice make no mistake." I believe you meant to put an "s" on "sometime" to denote more than once. Maybe not I just felt it would read smoother. It does not take away from the work at all. Great rhyime concise yet bold. I like this a lot.