Guilty Conscience? for friend Tate

tetrameter sonnet

Guilty conscience.

 

I know not what I’m haunted by

I feel its presence constantly.

Like some compulsive melody.

 which is repeated endlessly

Though I pretend I do not care

I am aware it’s always there.

I do not know if it is real.

I only know it makes me feel.

As if someone is watching me

Intruding on my privacy.

Perhaps it’s my subconscious mind.

 Which  is determined to remind

me of sins I try to forget

The things I’ve done I now regret.

 

Sunday, 24 July 2011

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Reviews

[Tate Morgan]

Being the subject of this piece feels like the mirror looking back at me and I am aware .It is what makes the road straight and narrow so to speak .Thank you sir

[Greg the Bard]

I really like the way you tie your lines together. It creates an ending to the entire work. Wonderful movement and great images.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

It peeks over our shoulders and whispers in our ears, but is it right? Wonderful piece.

[Sirajudin Matin]

Love this piece, The feeling is all too familiar sometimes.

[Donald Meikle]

And it's so damnably hard to ignore.
Perfect as usual.

[Caleb Pendleton]

The form of this poem works well and I enjoy the exploration of the subconscious as an entity apart from the self. As a rule of thumb, I do not enjoy rhyme. This poem uses it well, in a way that does not subtract from the value or maturity of the piece. So, in short, good work. Look forward to seeing more of your work.