A poem that's not a poem but what is a story in poem form if not original?

A poem that's not a poem but what is a story in poem form if not original?

A Poem by mae-mae<3
"

I really have no idea.

"

This is one hell of a week

Fighting with a gay boy

Yes, boy

He's no man

Getting stabbed in the back

By my closest friend

Fun fun fun

Seven days of hell

Wowza

I thought seven was a lucky number

But that's what you get

For believing in unproven stories

Failing a math test

Barely passing the marking period

Sorry to waste your time though

On reading this

It's not a poem really

More like small sentences

Without periods

While pressing enter now and again

No, not really a poem

This might be the worst poem I've written

© 2010 mae-mae<3


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Yeah, I've had similar weeks. Well, I've never gotten into a fight with a gay kid or been betrayed that badly by a friend, but I've had weeks where absolutely nothing goes right. I had one about two weeks ago. Sheesh. So I can totally empathize with you on this one. The poem itself is very raw and emotional, and it should definitely stay that way. Any further expansion into a story or anything else would take away from the oddness of your week. I also think you could have ended it at the "This might be the worst poem I've written" line. It would be a humorous and extremely tongue-in-cheek way to end the poem. Really good stuff, though. Keep up the good work!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Yeah, I've had similar weeks. Well, I've never gotten into a fight with a gay kid or been betrayed that badly by a friend, but I've had weeks where absolutely nothing goes right. I had one about two weeks ago. Sheesh. So I can totally empathize with you on this one. The poem itself is very raw and emotional, and it should definitely stay that way. Any further expansion into a story or anything else would take away from the oddness of your week. I also think you could have ended it at the "This might be the worst poem I've written" line. It would be a humorous and extremely tongue-in-cheek way to end the poem. Really good stuff, though. Keep up the good work!

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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