Red Velvet Tease

Red Velvet Tease

A Poem by Emily Dickinson Jr.
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Read! It's bout a "girl" that plays with one 2 many men's hearts. She got her game turned on her. One of the guys she played with became an obsessed stalker and wouldn't give her a moment of peace.

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Red velvet tease

 

I chase you

Through my dreams

 

Your voice so soft, so low

Takes away my choice

 

My weakness was my inhibition

 

 

But the lack

Are my golden, gilded chains

 

You whip away my sensibilities

You strip away my will

You hoard my every other

Thought and Prayer

 

The chain links clacked

They were too strong

 

You never guessed

Your siren song

Could go so wrong

 

That your sucuubi ties

Would make crazy

 

Obsession

 

That your practiced, pretty lies

Would result for you

 

A painful, bold lesson

© 2013 Emily Dickinson Jr.


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Love the way your stanza's differs in the number of lines. A strong poem with plenty of scope for the readers imagination to run away with them. The title is very erotic and love it to bits." The change links clacked" is my favourite line. The alliteration and assonance is excellent. Will review more of your work, but to late now and only joined here yesterday. Wrote an adult poem called "Lowri." Hope you can read it sometime. Its very raunchy.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

9 Years Ago

as I sighned up under my actual age it wont let me see any of the raunchier things lol :-) But id b.. read more
I like it. good job little hann-hann

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Emily Dickinson Jr.

9 Years Ago

sure ya can! mine used to be :-P
Emily Dickinson Jr.

9 Years Ago

and I cant help it if I'm not tall
MusicLover

9 Years Ago

:P
this was amazing awesome write:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

9 Years Ago

thanx! :-)
I liked this, I particularly liked the last stanza :)

Posted 9 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

9 Years Ago

Thanx ! I'm glad you liked it
I love the title, but I love the incredible language!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

9 Years Ago

Thanx so much!! I thought it was fitting :-)

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Added on August 15, 2012
Last Updated on April 26, 2013
Tags: slut, prostitute, succubi, chains, whip, man, succubis

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Emily Dickinson Jr.
Emily Dickinson Jr.

FL



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Im just a highschool girl. Writing is my hobby and I think Im fairly good at it but I leave you to be the judge of that. :-) my best short stories are: http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/poisinros.. more..

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