Hollie with an I and an E

Hollie with an I and an E

A Chapter by Emily Dickinson Jr.
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A little girl tells her class how she knows what a gun is when her guest speaker asks.

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       Mrs. Linden clapped her small hands twice and welcomed the silence that came instantaneously.


 

       "Class, We have a very special helper today! His name is Mr. Johnson. Say, hello."

 

       "Hello Mr. Johnson!" was the resulting echo from dozens of tiny voices.


 

       "Mr. Johnson, is here today to teach you how dangerous  guns are.  How many of you know what a gun is?"


 

          "It's a gray thingy that makes people bweed; I seen it in the howa movies." Chirped cheerfully out of the small body that had jumped up to answer the question.



       She had Brown, slightly frizzy, curled hair that went all the way down to her tiny bottom. It was only a shade or two lighter than black and had jumped with her when she answered. Her deep hazel eyes ringed in black, sparkled with the innocent want to be praised for her answer.

     " Excellent, girl! What's your name?" demanded the guest speaker.

      

        " Mista, My name's Hollie; with an I and an E!" squealed the young girl joyfully under all the attention.

   

     " Well kids, Hollie's right but only partly,"

 

She pouted at the correction.

 

     "they do make people bleed on TV, but they also do in real life.; they're dangerous.” he warned the class of four year-olds.

 

     “They's bad?" asked Hollie demurely.

 

     " Yes, Hollie, they can be very, very bad...." Mr. Johnson trailed off.

     

 " Buts! Buts, in the movies, the bloods and the shiny gun was sooooo pretty!" She exclaimed, begging him to understand her.

 

      Her last comment echoed through the silent classroom. It had turn disturbingly quite at her last comment. Mrs. Linden looked absolutely horrified, and so very frightened. Mr. Johnson however was smirking.

       He stared down his long, lean frame at Hollie.

You could see his green eyes glinting out of his widened sockets. They gleamed through his curtain of blond bangs.  They gleamed with such an intensity that it scared the kindergarden class. It scared the class almost as much as Hollie's statement had. 



© 2012 Emily Dickinson Jr.


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I like it a lot, I mean, I wasn't as shock to see her saying that, maybe because I'd seen kinds saying that in real life before, haha... But I think this is one very interesting story! I also like the end of the chapter, it's very absorbing!

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Emily Dickinson Jr.

8 Years Ago

im rly glad you liked it!! I always aim to be very decriptive and suprising lol


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This was interesting and a little creepy. No little four year old should ever speak like that, but I think this should be continued. It is entertaining. I think this little girl knows too much about guns. That's sad. This was nice though. Thanks for sharing.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

8 Years Ago

Oh the little girl is about to learn a lot more about guns but dont worry it seems creepier thanit i.. read more
Emily Dickinson Jr.

8 Years Ago

posted the next chapter! u should check it out
An interesting and poignant little piece given the numbers of high school shootings over the years. Is this sentence right as I thought Mr Johnson was speaking:
" Well kids, Hollie's right but only partly" She pouted '

Posted 8 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

8 Years Ago

Yes it was mr.Johnson you know cuz he's the speaker and all ....
I'm glad you liked it I am de.. read more
How intriguing! This should be continued.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

8 Years Ago

thank you I am planning on it!
M Garcia

8 Years Ago

Can't wait to read where you go with it! There seems to be a simpatico with Hollie and Mr. Johnson. .. read more
Interesting and yes, a little creepy, too. You did a good job with the
dialogue and bringing to life the way little-ones talk. I liked it.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

8 Years Ago

I'm glad you like it!!
I really like it. I loved the twist at the end! It was creepy, but then again most four year olds don't know what they're saying. Looking forward to reading chapter two! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

8 Years Ago

thanz Isobella! I'm glad you liked it :-)
I love it. An unexpected twist made me read it again to make sure I read it right! NIce work. When she said "bloods" is made me laugh, but then I read the whole sentence, and THEN I finally freaked out! :P

Posted 8 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

8 Years Ago

Lol niiice! I'm glad you cared enough to understand alot of people wouldn't. I wanted to empahsiz.. read more
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O geez that's freaky! :o But I'm used to it, when I was seven I wanted to be a dictator....yup I can relate.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

8 Years Ago

I think alot of ppl can lol!
I thought it was going to take a different turn, more cliche, but I was surprised! and very glad to be might I add. Great job

Posted 8 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

8 Years Ago

lol im glad you were pleasantly suprised!! Hannah don't do "cliche" . :-P
I love it, really draws you in. Can't wait to read more. your end truly drew me in, very good. :D

Posted 8 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

8 Years Ago

Thanx! lol thats always what I aim for in my first chapter
Mariah Corey

8 Years Ago

well great job. :D

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