Hollie with an I and an E

A little girl tells her class how she knows what a gun is when her guest speaker asks.

 

 

 

 

       Mrs. Linden clapped her small hands twice and welcomed the silence that came instantaneously.

 

       "Class, We have a very special helper today! His name is Mr. Johnson. Say, hello."

 

       "Hello Mr. Johnson!" was the resulting echo from dozens of tiny voices.

 

       "Mr. Johnson, is here today to teach you how dangerous  guns are.  How many of you know what a gun is?"

 

          "It's a gray thingy that makes people bweed; I seen it in the howa movies." Chirped cheerfully out of the small body that had jumped up to answer the question.

       She had Brown, slightly frizzy, curled hair that went all the way down to her tiny bottom. It was only a shade or two lighter than black and had jumped with her when she answered. Her deep hazel eyes ringed in black, sparkled with the innocent want to be praised for her answer.

     " Excellent, girl! What's your name?" demanded the guest speaker.

      

        " Mista, My name's Hollie; with an I and an E!" squealed the young girl joyfully under all the attention.

   

     " Well kids, Hollie's right but only partly,"

 

She pouted at the correction.

 

     "they do make people bleed on TV, but they also do in real life.; they're dangerous.” he warned the class of four year-olds.

 

     “They's bad?" asked Hollie demurely.

 

     " Yes, Hollie, they can be very, very bad...." Mr. Johnson trailed off.

     

 " Buts! Buts, in the movies, the bloods and the shiny gun was sooooo pretty!" She exclaimed, begging him to understand her.

 

      Her last comment echoed through the silent classroom. It had turn disturbingly quite at her last comment. Mrs. Linden looked absolutely horrified, and so very frightened. Mr. Johnson however was smirking.

       He stared down his long, lean frame at Hollie.

You could see his green eyes glinting out of his widened sockets. They gleamed through his curtain of blond bangs.  They gleamed with such an intensity that it scared the kindergarden class. It scared the class almost as much as Hollie's statement had. 

Reviews

[Heromen Selena]

Ooooo I got chills. Just a few punctuation mistakes but good descriptive skills. Can't wait to read more :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Yay! :-)

[Nath]

I liked it - it made me think of some show I watched a part of once, The Supernanny or something like that with a similiar concept, in which the nanny or whoever scolded the mother for letting her young child watch horror movies - I wonder what she would say to Hollie finding guns and blood pretty.
Personally, I think both Hollie's reaction to what she saw as well as Mr Johnson reaction to her fascination make the two rather interesting characters in what promises to become a fascinating story. Keep writing!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Im glad I raised the interest thats always my aim for the first chapter

[Nath]

It should be any writer's, you did a good job ;-)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

yay! :-)

[Soul Fire]

Wow amazing! I agree with Heather,you have serious talent girl!

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

its my first book and only my fourth story so Im glad its getting such feedback since im so unused to it

[Heather]

Wow Hannah, you have TALENT! This is amazing! such a profound piece of how American's find violence to not be that huge of a deal in the media.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

aww thanx heather! its my first book so I was slightly worried on the quality

[The Refined Poet]

what a commentary on violence and the media! nicely done

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol thanx that isnt the main idea of the story at all but my readers certainly dnt know that yet ;-)

[Nina St. Moritz]

I like it. Very mysterious and leaves me wanting more so far. Interested to see how this Hollie girl turns out, thinking guns are pretty. Is it just a childhood perception, or does she understand the danger and still think it's something beautiful? Hmm. Questions...

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

you will see ... I wrote this during seventh period cuz I have it free and I was bored ... dnt worry the next chapter will be up within a week

[Kiara]

I really like it so far. :) I love how you described Hollie too

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

Thanx! :-)

[Melody]

This sounds really good so far. It sounds like a prologue, though.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

well it is its the first chapter aka the prologue lol

[Melody]

Lol okay.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

u dnt need a prologue u knw? alot of ppl just like 2 4 some reason

[Melody]

Yeah I know, but that's just what I thought of when I read it. :P It's a very good start though. I like it because it keeps me wondering.

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

lol thats good then

[Melody]

Mhm. Lol :)

[Emily Dickinson Jr.]

actally i wud hv no idea how to make this a prologue