A regret-filled prayer

A regret-filled prayer

A Poem by Emily Dickinson Jr.
"

this for those reading may be sad, but to me it is hope.

"

Why would a nine year old

Slit her wrists

 

What could make her whisper

"Please, end this."

 

How could the world

Betray her so

 

How come they

Numb her soul

 

What'd a small girl

Ever do to you

 

How would you feel

If you knew

 

That she was suffering

Wondering

"What'd I do?"

 

What if you knew

Your outlet

Never hated you

 

What if the scars faded

Away

 

Her bright emotions faded

To gray

 

And told you

"It's okay!"

But .....

"I still can't feel ...

To this very day."

 

and you regret it

And you pray

 

"My lord, Please!"

"Make it go away!"

 

© 2012 Emily Dickinson Jr.  All rights reserved

 

© 2013 Emily Dickinson Jr.


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The narrator is challenged more than most. Yet while in the struggle there is still hope. Too many are there, in that moment, in the midst of the challenge. Good that you can speak it for those who might not have that voice or the words.

Cheers,
Doc.
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Posted 5 Years Ago


Very good piece, and a very good window into the eyes of someone who is struggling

Posted 5 Years Ago


Oouchh.. That was a sad but very effective piece..
NIce one Emily .. :) :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

6 Years Ago

Thanx :-). As someone who's been bullied herself as a child I take this subject very serious. I'm o.. read more
smilempsn

6 Years Ago

Ohh.. So sorry to hear, that this sad piece is one of your life story...
This was quite chilling actually. That someone so young should feel so much pain they would end their life.
Very emotional and heartbreaking g piece.

You did a wonderful job of pulling is into this child's unhappy world.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

6 Years Ago

I'm glad you could enter such a world. ppl dnt see it but its there and when you take the blinders .. read more
sadly emotional...nice work on this in depth view...

Posted 7 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

7 Years Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed the piece! :-D
to be a nine year old and even be able to think that way is truly amazing. To think: what has happened to this girl and why would she think this?"
At nine: I saw my mom almost killed and i didnt have these thoughts.
It is a wounderful pice and gets people to think and to wounder.
Thank you for sharing:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

7 Years Ago

You'r welcome! this isnt complete fiction either I knew a girl at nine and she really did cut herse.. read more
These kind of questions asked in horrific situations in life are perhaps without the right answers to the one in pain, the one suffering, the one violated, abused, forgotten, lonely, and so many more happenings that could cause one so young to feel as this!! It is all so sad, so very, very sad - the emotion which you have captured in your poem of urgency and awakening! God help the little children!!
A most poignant write!!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

7 Years Ago

I'm glad you appreciated it!!
This hits home in so many ways. We all second guess choices we make in our lives, but this one is so sad. I've always tried to help those in need...even if pain fills my own life. This was very expressive poem. Thank you for sharing and excellent job. Maybe, if anything, for those who have read it, we'll make the right choice when the time comes.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

7 Years Ago

I hope for that more than anything when ppl read my work
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This is heartwrenching! It seems to me that this kind of thing is happening with younger and younger children these days. It is saddening.
A heads up: there are two typo's I spotted......1)line 3-wisper should be whisper. 2) line 17-you're outlet should be your outlet.
Well done, my friend.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Emily Dickinson Jr.

7 Years Ago

lol I'll fix that up in a jiff

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