Little Doll

pretty little girl

charming little thing

frightened of her mind

never says a thing

pretty little doll

child on display

you will never hear her cries

you only see her play

such a little actress

she will never tell

something deep inside of her

a darkness overwhelms

pretty little doll

just a silly little girl

knowing more than she should

of her little world

pretty little one

darling little thing

she doesnt want to hurt them

if they realize what she's seen

 

 

Author's Note

if you took the time to read it, please review it. thanks :)

Reviews

[Bare trees]

"If they realize what she's seen" to me might not necesserily mean anything happened TO her physically. She may have seen something that would disturb her so much that she's gone within herself. So many adults don't realize how perseptible children are about their surroundings. Suppose she saw a rape, or a murder or something else of that nature. This is not to say that it wouldn't be about her being hurt physically, but I just get a sense that my first thought is the one. A great poem Kayleen.

[-Glasses.Classic.]

That poem I came across by pure chance.
I'm glad chance has given me the advantage to read your poem.
It's veyr simply put with strong use of words in few lines.

[Mary]

i liked it, good job! :)

[Adrian K. Smith]

I enjoy reading the works of writers that do not feel they have to chain you to a wall while stabbing at you with a medium point BiC stating this is the only option, you will accept this option, you will think what I want! This does that well, bringing us along through the tale and ending with:

"she doesnt want to hurt them
if they realize what she's seen"

Because with that, you give us the opportunity to wonder - to participate - instead of just be a passenger. You give us the fish, but you allow us to prepare it as we can imagine...and that is a wonderful thing to be able to do as well as you have here. Thank you for sharing this with us.

[Dennis Shanaberg]

I really like this one, as I can relate.
Growing up, I had a very hard time actually talking to anyone about anything. Kept everything bottled up.
This is very well written and was a perfect choice of words. What appear to be just be different variations on this girl appearing so small and innocent, but obviously having experienced things beyond this, actually point to things even further beyond this.

A pretty/charming/silly little doll/thing points to her being almost insignificant to the people around her. Little actress points out the fact that each day she has to live a lie, acting, so no one knows what she has been through.
Awesome and flawless job. Keep it up.

[Bexfinch]

adults don't realize how much we know and see . and the young minds knowledge can scare you to death. i even scare myself with thoughts that could kill thousands
and dream that could hurt a nation. but yet i am still a child

[NotYourChinaDoll]

I like this. Your repetition of the word "little" when she is obviously big enough to hide something. Little doesn't always mean innocent and naive.

[Dylan Patrick]

I took the time to read it, so I'll review it. I really liked the poem, mostly the rhyme and short rhythm. I like how it has a story aspect as well, leaving one to wonder what exactly the little girl could have seen. It was fun to read. Well done.

[Porter]

Your poem took me back to my childhood. Some of the feelings expressed in your poem I remember feeling like: You will never hear her cries she will never tell, something deep inside her a darkness overwhelms she does'nt want to hurt them if they realize what she's seen. Bravo, such heartfelt expression!

[Gabriella]

Love this poem. As many poems as I've seen like this, I don't feel like yours is cliche at all. I like the short lines, and the simplistic childish (this is not an insult, just for lack of a better word) rhyme scheme.

[Michael X]

Wow, powerful and creative, i loved the sincere effort surrendered. it brings your words to life. the messege is heartaching and sentimental. awsome job