Feeling empty

                                          I was walking along the river

                                          feeling empty

                                          and ill at ease

                                          The fish followed

                                          along my current and

                                          looked at me 

                                          as if to tease

                                          But, they jumped 

                                          up onto the shore  

                                          and said let me fill your bank. 

                                          

Reviews

[Linda alexander]

Very thought provoking, there are so many concerns here, some one already feeling empty, so why did the fish jumped to the shore to that person more empty, we should blame the fish as it is beyond our control to regulate it's movements, great write really enjoyed, plenty will relate to this poem for sure, take care

[Dee]

I liked the beginning very much and the part about the fish following
a human current not a river or lake current.
Fish die out of water so I take it that by jumping out of their safe zone
they gave themslves up to you to ease your emptiness....or do I have this all wrong??

[paul sal.....]

you got it all right..................

[Pax]

Profound, the title hooks every reader who feels this way. I do feel empty, specially now, here in my current state, it is a hard life out here, but we do what we must for us to earn a living by just merely living... sigh... this piece tells so much of many who suffers from this state... great!

[captain]

that totally describes it! Great, I felt this emptied feeling most of the time... so i could totally relate.

[Frontier]

Wow what an unexpected ending, I really like it! :) I'd like you to review my poem, Hibernation.

[paul sal.....]

thanks, I will