smile! : (

smile! : (

A Poem by Muhammad Qasim
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inspired by the writing of a friend!

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A hint of sadness
Behind that .. Smile

That smile
With those desperate eyes

That smile
Keeping those tears at bay

It was a smile
But only a smile

With emptiness behind
That smile

Had more heat
Than the sun

That smile
Longer than a mile

But empty 
It was

That smile
With nothing behind
But sadness

Yet that smile
Kept on smiling!! : ))

© 2012 Muhammad Qasim


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'Yet that smile
Kept on smiling!!'

:) :) Nice words ....

Posted 7 Years Ago


Muhammad Qasim

7 Years Ago

yup :D < see
smilempsn

7 Years Ago

:)
Muhammad Qasim

7 Years Ago

:)
Good use of the word, "that smile" and I hope the one characterized here will surely keep on smiling~!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Muhammad Qasim

7 Years Ago

thanks too you a little ;)
Rhianne Ney

7 Years Ago

Muhammad Qasim

7 Years Ago

haha
Sometimes, that's all it takes :) a gorgeous write, very profound. Just keep swimming, as Dory :D would say, no matter what. love this :) ~em

Posted 7 Years Ago


Muhammad Qasim

7 Years Ago

oh..haha..if i find it..ill be sure to let u know! :)
Lina Grey

7 Years Ago

I'll do the same :)
Muhammad Qasim

7 Years Ago

:)
I love the idea behind this poem, and you had some promising lines. My favorite being,

"That smile
Had more heat
Than the sun"
When you wrote this, you were really saying something. The smile has anger behind it, and defied all science behind an actual smile. You should have played more off of that for sure!
Nice write (:

Posted 7 Years Ago


Muhammad Qasim

7 Years Ago

i am glad you found something great in this peace :) ..... and i tried to keep the length short cuz .. read more
LouisianaBird

7 Years Ago

Hahaha! This is true for some people, but you shouldn't let that limit you!
Muhammad Qasim

7 Years Ago

hmmmm....i don't agree much with others but i will here...u have a point : )
very profound, written with simplistic eloquence that flows, heart-felt poem most can relate to. thanks for sharing and your kind review on "sshh" - keep writing :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Muhammad Qasim

7 Years Ago

Doesnt matter where it was written .. you wrote it and it was good
ms. barrie

7 Years Ago

thank you, and this poem was wonderful, very enjoyable read!
Muhammad Qasim

7 Years Ago

Thank you .. and so was yours
I know how this feels. Wonderful description. ^_^

Posted 7 Years Ago


Muhammad Qasim

7 Years Ago

Thank you : )
smile :)
wonderful interpretation on how people wear it ..

Posted 7 Years Ago


Muhammad Qasim

7 Years Ago

Thank you ..
Yes, oh yes. I love it. Very well done!

Posted 7 Years Ago


Muhammad Qasim

7 Years Ago

Thank you!! : )
this was very vivid based off of only one memory, very nice job

Posted 7 Years Ago


Muhammad Qasim

7 Years Ago

Thank you .. And no aliens here .. hehe
RachelReaper

7 Years Ago

lol
it's easy for few people to keep up that fake smile.and i think that it's a sign of their bravery.to even smile in that difficult situation..so what if it's fake.......there so many things that are fake in this world!!!!!
i like the desperate feel of the poem and the way you penned it is really very appreciable........the message is so pure
thanks for sharing it with us:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Muhammad Qasim

7 Years Ago

Hmm acha!!
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Added on November 9, 2012
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Tags: Smile, Sadness, Emptiness

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Muhammad Qasim

London, United Kingdom



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