Dreamy stream!

just had to write something! this came to mind :)

That dreamy stream
Where birds are of cream
Let me dream
Of that unimaginable ream

My creamy dreams above the sky
Let me silently pry

Let me be the king
In that endless ocean

Let me radiantly shine
Anywhere i audaciously dine

Let me compel every dare
Help me breath leeway air

Let me find my perfect pair
In my very own layer


Let me drive
So i am out of your hair
Help me survive
Let me be in my own care
So i don't strive!!

Reviews

[Mary Christabel George]

The rhyming catches attention.

[Muhammad Qasim]

hehe.. Thank you

[Mary Christabel George]

Welcome

[Acer]

Package ain't bad, i liked it.

[Muhammad Qasim]

Oh Thank you for liking it :)

[Acer]

My pleasure.

[Muhammad Qasim]

:)

[The dark story]

Oh well…it.s kinda interesting…and no offence well but it does make sense in a lot of way as our dreams do…they may be very wweird or something not making any sense but it truly do make ahell lot sense…beside our dreams are the intervention of God(that's what my teacher taught me)…anyway I enjoyed it and the way you penned it…nice work!!

[Muhammad Qasim]

why would i be offended!! it is true! and your teacher taught you about right but scientifically it's our subconscious brain making connections with our conscious mind and religiously...it s a different story and thanks! for the wonderful review

[The dark story]

science and religion...they both follow different paths..but i believe that science can have no true value without religious belief...for an instance...whatever i have learnt from school by reading science books ..those things were already mention in the Quran and in many tales my mom told me!!
...and let be more precise..it's the cerebrum responsible for our subconscious mind:P

[Muhammad Qasim]

Science is the explanation of all things but religion is a fundamental belief of people!! they are like the sky and eartH!! science came to explain somethings that has already been told in our religion but then again...behind those religious reasons...science had a hand!!

[The dark story]

"Impressed"…u know u can explain urslf very nicely:) :)…I agree to all that!!

[Muhammad Qasim]

hehe... thanks!! :)

[Moniba]

It rhymes perfectly... But doesn't make all that much sense. The idea is good though, you could use it to write a better poem.

[Muhammad Qasim]

i guess you are right... i'll give the idea a thought and thanks for the review :) means a lot!!

[Moniba]

Sure thing.

[Muhammad Qasim]

:)