Lá Fhéile Pádraig, "the Day of the Festival of Patrick"

Lá Fhéile Pádraig, "the Day of the Festival of Patrick"

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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this is my third weeks assignment for the MOOC i am in .. we had two choices and mine was to write a Pantoum. It also is supposed to address a cultural tradition with its meaning then and today

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a Pantoum
My Da wasn't much of a talking man;
he loved his stew and brew.
At table he told us a story
of how the Green holds true.
He loved his stew and brew but
harpooned his feeling free.
At table he told us a story or two
while bouncing me on his knee.
Harpooning his feeling free,
tears pierced his cheek that day.
While bouncing me on his knee;
he knew i would go away.
A tear pierced his cheek that day.
Diaspora paraded the streets.
He knew i would go away;
while cèilidhs of Dál Riata did meet
When diaspora paraded the ave
they forgot the bones and the teeth.
While cèilidhs of Dal Riata gathered
babies died in the streets.
They forgot the bones and the teeth.
At table he told a story or two.
Babies died in the streets.
It never was talked of, 'tis true

© 2017 Einstein Noodle


Author's Note

Einstein Noodle
The Pantoum is made up of any number of quatrains. The second and fourth lines of preceding verses becomes the first and third line of the following verse. The last verse is a little different in that the first and third line are the second and fourth of the stanza above and the closing line is many times repeats the opening line.

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Thank you for sharing this excellently rendered effort, Gene....
I find this piece to be well worded and expressed, while tragically sad to contemplate, and I also very much enjoy that you've included a touch of Gaelic historical fact and dialect for our enlightenment.
I felt a surge of palpably impacting power, both in emotion and imagery, from the trying tyme threaded deftly throughout.

It is quite easy to tell you poured a considerable bit of your heart and soul out onto the page, as-well-as, gave an honest effort to "get it right" in detail and form, and we both know the Pantoum is not all that simple, eh?
Cultural recountings like this are bound to touch deeply into my own Celtic core -- from the more tragic days of yore under the red dragon in me oon daer Wales … well told, Syr Bard.

Technically, there are a number of issues you could address, if you've the mind to.
Love the Gaelic title and use … would be great to include pronouncements and translations in Author's Note. I think your choice of music and its picture are spot-on to carry the mood.

Another fine effort from one of the site's most entertaining artists.
Thank you, My Fine Friend … SLAINTE! ⁓ Richard 🍃

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

:) Slainte Mhath :) glad this touched your Celtic soul Richard ... yes! the troubles ... three gener.. read more
Einstein Noodle, this is an excellent pantoum. The subject (St. Patrick) is tremendously heart wrenching, but each verse of the poem enlightens the reader.

You are really good at formal poetry and I hope you continue. I loved your version of the pantoum.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Tamara Beryl Latham

9 Months Ago

Thanks Einstein. I'll try to post some different forms of classical poetry.

Decades .. read more
Einstein Noodle

9 Months Ago

that's a shame ... you must have gained some wonderful experience participating in such a way.
Tamara Beryl Latham

9 Months Ago

Yes, a little. Way too much work though. There was a classical poetry publication titled "The Form.. read more
What an amazing tale is told here and so darn adeptly too... I would never dare try anything so complex.. Peace, Love & All Good Things, plus a whole heap of respect.... N

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

oh Neville! it was a nightmare ...I can't tell you the write and re-writes ...every time I re-checke.. read more
Neville

1 Year Ago

Ha' I can imagine the nightmare... always a pleasure tho when I visit your pages here......Neville
Powerful use of this format

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

it was no easy breezy Cherrie :} i can't tell you how many re-writes i went through and still am not.. read more
Cherrie Palmer

1 Year Ago

I get it, it is very hard to be happy with a set gh low like this one, but you hit it dead-on.
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks Cherrie :)
You certainly nailed the form but with another amazing slice of history served up raw. Kudos!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

John...this form was so confusing to me..i was sure my dementia was triggering ;} ..it was worked an.. read more
Great write Einstein.
Those words from parents must have left haunting memories. Sad that even today, those same words are spoken in many languages to children.


Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

yes indeed, Paul .. our children do leave at some point in time .. and if heritage is not taught it .. read more
A tear pierced his cheek that day.
Diaspora paraded the streets.
He knew i would go away;

a touching story and nicely done E... you do put lot of effort into your assignments... and must appreciate your patience for learning new things..

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

oh this was not an easy one its true ...and i re-worked it over and over trying to get it a bit bett.. read more
So richly painted in a dark, full language of the mystic colors. The voice seems to resonate over time, over endless passages of life and everlasting lives found on every stone. There is a novel found in your letters and lines.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

Ar scáth a chéile a mhaireann na daoine. ;)
An owl on the moon

2 Years Ago

D'fhéadfadh siad go léir a athrú i bhfianaise. :)
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

:) yes indeed ..its the light that holds life for sure
I liked this very much.. I had to google to find out what cèilidhs of Dal Riata meant.. my Grandmother was the last of the American Scotts that spoke Gaelic.. sad loss that.. both the language and my Gram.. thank you for giving me a reason to look.. and learn a bit more about my roots..

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

oh my goodness olla! i would love to know more of your Gram .. and loss .. yes what loss for sure .... read more
olla

2 Years Ago

I didn't know my Gram very well.. I was a child when she passed.. but the mystery of who she was dro.. read more
Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

:) ................
The Pantoum, what a complicated format. But I
It is true.. many stories are passed on,but often the 'bad' things are ignored and just not talked of. Well written, Einstein.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

2 Years Ago

thanks Auntie .. our next assignment was to take the pantoum and "explode it" minimize it and yet re.. read more

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