Alone

Alone

A Poem by Einstein Noodle
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do take the time to watch the dance video ..it is so cool...says i! ;)

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 Peering
The pair pirouettes on
                                  the pier.
The lightning wasn't quite right
             
they
couldn't quite focus on point.
I am not sure what happened to them.
They just kept spinning 
on their own
in the mist.
                      Alone
10/15/2017
E

© 2017 Einstein Noodle


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Much like Life and writing, lol

Posted 3 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

3 Months Ago

it can be can't it gram! love your visit sir ... thank you! :)
E.
You clearly captured the essence surrounding this dance in this video with your words and the dance itself so in effect motion is captured by the stillness of words. Well done

Posted 6 Months Ago


Einstein Noodle

6 Months Ago

yes!! love that video ... so glad you felt the connection with the poem ... nice to meet you Kent! i.. read more
The video was mind-pausing and inspired - thanks man.

The poem totally captured my mind's eyes...

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

your reading and reviws always most welcome Chris! thank you ..and really happy you mention the vide.. read more
Maybe they were happy spinning their way into the netherworld. Together. Alone. I don't know. Facing the end with a great partner, even if deluded, is a beautiful thing. Another great poem. So simple and elegant. Cheers. CD

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks so much CD ..so happy it sent you on that journey ... so much is simply about the dance ;)read more
Loved this
I think even without the pic your poem stands alone high looking for the performers

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thank you for your kindness Julie ... i wrote the poem then went looking for the video ... and loved.. read more
was the video an inspiration? because i can see that!
this is a very interesting story, made me think. i'd say it could be interpreted a number of ways. they could be people stuck in a cycle/the past, people who are lost trying to find themselves, they could be ghosts..
i love how you left the word "they" (line 5) by itself, it emphasizes the fact that they're alone. very creative!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thank you ...i found the video after the poem ..very serendipity to find one that (i think) fits wel.. read more
a complete story in such a small space, I hear a lone harp bringing them into focus, until in silence we stare at an empty pier.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

ooooooooooooooo the harp a-stringin' ...love it .. thank you so much for your heartfelt review ... w.. read more
Perhaps they were together in the separation?

Regards,
Al

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

perhaps they were sir ...wonder if they will ever tell us ;)
thanks so much for reading and t.. read more
Love the way you’ve used the notion of dance to convey your message

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thank you for taking time simba! and nice to meet you .. did you watch the video? i think its fantas.. read more
I like the alliterations in the first part. Also the fragmented structuring, it reads nicely. As per the content, it's dreamily beautiful. A lovely read, Einstein. (:

Posted 1 Year Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

thanks for reviewing Doc! did you watch the dancers? ;)
E.
Dr. YumnaKay

1 Year Ago

You're welcome :) tbh I'm not much into dancing videos but I watched this one just now ;) it's beaut.. read more
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

every time i come back to this one i have to watch it again...i think they are superb ..water and st.. read more

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