The Deep

this is a lipogram i wrote for a class (same class the cinquaine was written for) the lipogram, for those who are unfamiliar with, is a poem using one vowel only. i chose "E"

"The Deep"

The endless Ether

left deep clefts                                        

heed me

keep knees free

                                     enter the descent

                                                                     Hell's decree bends the rent

See me!?

Steep we creep

Spent.

Endless Ether we flee

11/28/2018

E.

Author's Note

I struggled to have a theme ... would really like to know if you have a sense of one .. :}

Reviews

[DIVYA]

It’s a different kind of creative joy when we are able to produce worthwhile expression within the limitation of format and structure. For me that’s the supreme kind of satisfaction. I read the endless twists, turns and bends as we navigate, crawl, hurtle through the all pervading ether to our ordained ends. Appreciated very much, E 💕

[Einstein Noodle]

yes...that is so "it" my friend .. i was worried about theme coming through but the reviews seem to indicate it does ..and especially yours, Divya ..you wrapped it all up in a nutshell ..i sure appreciate your sensitivity and the time you took here to review ..i am encouraged ;) glad you enjoyed reading and pondering with me
E.

[DIVYA]

You must be encouraged if the result is such interesting poetry ;)
Thank you E, it is a pleasure to exchange thoughts on writing, a passion, an obsession but such a positive one for us 💕

[Einstein Noodle]

yes it is Divya .. truly an honor and pleasure ..its a bit after 1 AM here ..so i say ...top o' the mahrnin' to ya! ;) hugs!

[DIVYA]

Oh bedtime then! :)
GoodMorning hugs! And do grab a bit of sleep :))))

[Einstein Noodle]

headed that way now ;)

[DIVYA]

.......😉☺️😊.......

[Maxwell Ryder]

E is elevating, exciting and engrossing. This is hard to pull off. I will stick with all the vowels (weapons) in this war to Express mysElf. Thanks, Einstein.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha as i will as well Max!! we do need all we can get for sure! thank you so much for taking time and i'm pretty happy you found it engrossing ... couldn't ask for more my friend!
E.

[Lyn Anderson]

We are all fleeing death the moment we arrive

[Einstein Noodle]

yes we are, aren't we...fleeing right into its arms ;))))))))))) luv ya Lyn ...luv ya reviewing always ..thanks so much!
E.

[Neville]

never heard of it but from what ya say and what I see, you paid more than just lip service to this particular form... even without the explanation tho this would have been a most enjoyable and intriguing write, in its own right... nothing quite like hurtling through ether, ether is there E.... N..... D x

[Einstein Noodle]

yes it is ..undeniably so Neville ... so much mystery with every breath isn't it my friend ;)))
read moreyes it is ..undeniably so Neville ... so much mystery with every breath isn't it my friend ;)))
E.

[Einstein Noodle]

ps. caught your E...N...D ... you little devil you ;)

[Neville]

ha.. no flies on you my friend.. they used to call me neville the devil... dunno why.. dont s'pose it had anything to do with raping chickens and biting the heads off young virgins do ya:)

[andrew mitchell]

Very Clever Gene, a very smart brevity format delivering as always in the unique Gene style. I like it!

[Einstein Noodle]

glad you enjoyed reading my friend .. using one vowel only forces a certain brevity i think .. this was challenging for me ...to have it make some kind of sense ... we are on the same page as brevity ... i'd say we are brothers in the minimalist movement ;) thanks for taking time here always andrew!
E.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I think the theme here is the struggle, The victory of light in the darkness....the listening of sound in the silence....A calliope!

[Einstein Noodle]

a calliope!! oh my goodness...that's perfect Crippled Queen .. i can here it as i struggle and loose and find myself ... drifting the ether ;) thanks so much for reading ..that music puts a whole other face on it doesn't it!?
E.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Wow- have never heard of this form and how well you did with it E.! “Steep we creep...Spent.”- love that line. Once again I am schooled by you- many thanks!

[Einstein Noodle]

oh darlin' you humble me ..truly blushing ( a bane for me in high school:) for me the line that drew you is the most important one ..thank you for checking this out ... i have taken several free on-line writing classes that always move the muse and enlighten me ..poetry is a huge field i never really realized ..love and peace to ya Annette!
E.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

.........:))))))

[Ken Simm.]

Interesting and enigmatic my friend. I can follow this through on many sensitive levels. Perhaps and this is my favourite we need to open ourselves up to the ether to create fully. An excellent piece Gene.

[Einstein Noodle]

thanks Ken ..i do agree ..our ether aura can always use a probing into ;) yes... very enigmatic .. but i am gratified you are able to accept that and look through some levels .. love ya man!
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

Beyond the clouds, flying free.....or perhaps hell opening up and allowing you entrance. In either case, the flow of words is mesmerizing. Interesting form. Of course you chose "E"....we all knew you would! :) Lydi**

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahaha thank you for saying so Lyd! yes! "E" of course :)))))))))) and yes those are the questions aren't they ... can be terrifying eh!? be well and prosper in the day dahlink!
E.

[Lydia Shutter]

Sending hugs your way, my friend. Take care.

[lightsong]

the cinquaine was spreading like a virus here (of course the very good one ;) ) now You give us this challenging form, I'm sure it will be spreading like a virus too :)

I like the format, the way Your words played slowly as they were going down the page, made feel like I'm floating free as a tiny atom in the air, our years going down like Your words, then we will be buried under earth, going deep but not there, going deep up, as our souls fading, flying into the sky, this one is very interesting and have a profound touch, and surely what else than the E You would use as a vowel ;)

[Einstein Noodle]

yes...of course the E ;)))))))))) and yes yes yes ..going deep up ..you are so perceptive Light! I am really glad you stopped to read this one and review ..it means a lot to me ..peace and joy my friend!
as always,
E. :)